Alainna

I absolutely disagree with Faith. (By the way the whole point of this site is to give constructive crit, not to patronize...) Although a hard thing to write, this is ...

This is horrible but true. The government (British and American) would rather spend money KILLING people, than saving people. For every 1 million pounds spent on ammunition, only 1p goes ...

I agree with Mad, the one word last line could make the second stanza much better, more forceful. I really loved the first stanza, very passionate and vivid imagery. The ...

Still as emotive as before, but much better now it's longer. Repetition works well and the last line is great. This line still isn't fab, but its only my opinion: ...

I like the detail with the toenails, intriguing yet horrible at the same time! Couple of grammatical errors: I was as think as a twig anyway *Thin I was jealous ...

This was a very good piece, I loved the fact that it had a twist and didn't go down the typical soppy way that some poems do. The only thing ...

I like the style this is written in, I think the voice is very good and it is quite smooth. There should be an 'a' before the word fool in ...

This was good. I think it could have flowed better though as it was a bit jumpy. Maybe having shorter sentences, but longer stanzas would work better, or simply play ...

:o :shock: :o Oh my......that was true emotion...There were a few spelling mistakes and the word 'well' was overused at times. I learnt loads of new stuff about the story ...

That was really......truthful. I suppose I have examined people on the bus before, in fact I do this all the time on the tube. I really want to know their ...

I read it as part of my research for my public speaking on Witches and it was great!! I never expected to read a play and find it that gripping, ...

I've read the Sisterhood Of the Traveling Pants (1 & 2). They were really good...the first one was the best!! I loved the first book because I related to it ...

I liked this poem, it kept my attention really well. Some of it was a bit...out of place, as though you were rhyming for the sake of it. For example: ...

Wow....that is one way of shocking someone out of becoming bulimic! It was really good but there needed to be more...tension and Ted didn't really call for help or anything... ...

I've read bits of this already........when you had it as canned beans. This is a good start and I really like this: Or, maybe€¦this will explain it better. When your ...