AdoxagraphyAngelus

Let me start off with saying I LOVED this! Happy Birthday, my child! You’re now officially a teen. And according to the public, you’re impulsive and obscene. Amen. All I ...

I really enjoyed this! :) The diary entries were simple and clean cut, which was good, considering that the girl who owns the diary is young. The diary entries still ...

Drugs, Why people do drugs? They hear its bad Comma They know its wrong Comma But why why do they do them So[color=#FF0000] [/color]long? I know the cancer Comma I ...

I walk down the Hall Of one hundred mirrors. In each one I see a different face staring back at me even though they're all the same In one,who I ...

This poem was brutally true, and I can't even begin to express how much I adore it. It rang of truth, and showed just how shallow this world is. The ...

I LOVED this. :) It was comedic, in a way, but also made sense. It twas awesome. :)

Hey. :) First off, welcome to YWS! If your titles isn't lying, which says your a new member, then welcome. :) Now onto critiquing. One of the only things that ...

That was amazing. I was transfixed the whole time, my eyes glued to the screen. It was haunting, and it makes the reader want to know what exactly made this ...

My father was a soldier. Major Summers. He lead the fifth platoon in the war against Angola at the South African borders. Many young South African men died during that ...

Your poem was short and sweet. I really liked it. :) I love that a lot of people are like that- Me, for one. Great job. :)

I really enjoyed this, but one thing is that it seems like a short story rather than a poem. This is just because of the format you have it in. ...

Hey. :) First off, welcome to YWS. You'll love it. Second, your poem is lacking context and hooks. You need to draw your reader in, even in poetry, and make ...

Another awesome chapter, Micki-More. :) The pounding in my head woke me from my dull unconsciousness. I realized with confusion that I was no longer near the car wreck. I ...

Hey hey hey. :) Something about this poem was just a bit off for some reason. I think it was because of your unique and interesting way of writing poetry. ...

Hey, Micki-More. :) I agree with Caligraphy, who reviewed before me, work on your hook. The first sentence needs to pull people in, make them want more, leave them wondering ...