Hi! I can completely relate to this poem and I think that's why I really like it. It's short and sweet and it flows and rhymes really well, so no problems there. I would say that it could do with being a bit longer, but I think you've said all you need to say really. I'd normally say your rhyming is a bit simple and predictable but in this instance I think it sounds young and innocent and lends to the tone of the poem. Overall, good job.
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