Hello hello I hope you dont mind me popping in with a quick review. I don't think I've read the other pieces linked to this one so forgive me if get some things wrong. With that being said I hope my thoughts could brighten your day all the same. Let's get into it, shall we?
Overall I found this a very bittersweet piece. It does sound like the siblings truly caews about each other only to meet a sad end. It seems like Lilie might have found her brother in whatever state he was in and was shaken. Yet at the same time, they are happy to spend the rest of their afterlives with Percy.
Maybe this would be a joyous ending if I didn't have the shrinking feeling they didn't live much longer than he did. Although I cant be sure and dont have the full context I just have a hunch these two lasted a few months or one to two years after finding him. It could be because it's common in horror or because finding your passed-away sibling would make go through some poor mental health so I could see it sadly.
Now moving on to feedback. I promise this will be very short this time around. As always I am not a professional nor do you have to use anything I say. You are the author after all.
I won't go too much into this as I do Luminscent Ant on the metaphors and verbs. Furthermore, I do wish you expanded more on the aftermath of the sisters finding him. This could make the ending even more tragic because we get into their guttural reactions before figuring out they died.
Regardless I found this interesting but conflicting read. I hope to read the other new posts you posted sometime this weekend. As always keep writing and remember to drink water!
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