*This song/poem is under my folder titled “Elsdale circus”. Gacha Club character designs are under my forum titled “My character designs<33[2]”. Enjoy!*
Celia and Delia’s Mom and Dad
Watched from Heaven
As their little girls had begun to feel more frightened and sad
Oh, they’d hold them close one day
And let them cry into their arms
But up in Heaven, they could watch
As they suffered all alone
Why, if they could come down they would
For it felt too high without them around
Wasn’t Heaven supposed to be a happy place?
Why did they feel like they were going to drown?
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Oh that is such a sad and revealing line:
I really like that image!
Again I like that you show the parents' point of view; I will keep pointing that out!
You can really feel the emotions in this one. No comments, just very tragic!
I bet I can find more stories that show what's going on on Earth if I continue the work. So, have a great day and keep up your work
Thank you. I do try to do everyone%u2019s POVs, parents included. Most ppl would not think of them. At least, I think lol.
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Hiya, Vamp! I'm here to give this poem a quick review, hope you don't mind!
Ooo, and here we finally get more of an idea of Celia and Delia's parents, and where they stand in this massive tragedy! Poor guys, having to watch everything that transpired, unable to do anything. Much like Wyatt and others who came to know the Elsdale cast, I imagine...
As far as recommendations go, I have nothing! Great writing job ~
For favorite lines, hmmm...I would have to go with:
Not only did this capture that paternal/maternal emotion in this poem, but it touches on that bittersweet idea that comes with the twins' passing. On one hand, it's sad that they died so young and in such a grizzly manner, but on the other hand, at least they can be with their parents for them.
LOVED this line!! Indeed, there are some crucial things (or rather, people) you can't be truly happy without, so what is Heaven if not for those things, not just a place??
Anyway, that's all I have for now. Great poem!
"They who dream by day are cognizant of many things which escape those who dream only by night."
"Words have no power to impress the mind without the exquisite horror of their reality.”
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Thank you for your review! Also, love the new username!
You're welcome, and thank you!!
Ofc!!!
I created this!:
🪄🖤 Caspian and Margot’s parents 🖤🪄
Awesome! Im on a little hiatus rn due to an art project, but will queue it up!
Okay!