Wow! You're interested! Thank you! I published this book, see, and this poem is in it, so if you want to read it, you're gonna have to buy the book now. ♥
http://www.amazon.com/dp/B00J49ZE54
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I found this a little generic. What I mean is that it's a decent poem, but it's nothing new. It expresses cliche subject matter without bringing depth or substance to it, and while it's talking about something relatable it's also talking about something that's been done a thousand times and is now lackluster. Try finding something to really make your poetry shine through and have an extra ounce of you-ness. And of course....
Keep writing!
Hey, this is a sweet poem and rather well written.
It's a wonderful poem about loss and confusion I guess. This is just what I got from it.
I found maybe the tome of it wasn't as deep and emotional as it could, this can simply be fixed by readjusting a few words and adding some.
Apart from that there really isn't much more a can critique, it is gorgeous and so simple.
Sometimes simple poems are the best type!
Take care and keep writing
Love Nargles xxx