Fear
You are always with us.
You reveal our darkest nightmares.
You are what causes anxiety.
But then again the only thing to fear is fear itself.
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Just one little nitpick and then I'll go on about how much I liked it...
You reveal our darkest nightmares.
It should be "our" not "are", yes?
Other than that little bit, this poem was wonderful. Short, sweet, and wonderful. No imagery, but it wasn't necessary...you know? It sends a shiver up (or down...) your spine. Fear is one of those things that totally freaks people out, but once its over and you realize that there was nothing to fear, you laugh about it.
i don't usually enjoy short poems, but this is really powerful, and i like it. the only thing is the second line, I somehow think that's a mistake? but otherwise, this was really good! It certainly made me stop and think, which is great.
Interesting short poem. What I spotted right off the bat was the second line. It should be "You reveal our darkest nightmares."
I think everyone else got the rest of the mistakes. KEEP WRITING!!!
So short, but extremely powerful words. Fear does get the best and worst of us. I hate it when people say ( especially men) claim to not be afraid of anything. I believe that everybody on this Earth is afraid of something. Anyway, this poem was enjoyable to read and I hope to read more of your work! Great job and good luck!
Seriously, what obsession does everyone have about posting poems about fear?
You did that, JustMe did that, I did that (though it's in the Dramatic Poetry section)...
But let's get to the poem. I thought it was too short and thus didn't really give us anything. Of course it may just be me because of my poem of the same title... I don't know.
I think it should be "You are what causes anxiety", "causes" with an "s", that is.
I have nothing else to say.
Best wishes from
Demeter
Wow, two poems about fear in close quaters. Both very well done I must add. I have very little to contribute beyond that, though.
That was pretty awesome, but you had a few grammar mistakes...
There should be a semi-colone or a comma here, but these are good lines.
A comma after "anxiety", and then maybe three dots after "is".
Other than that, it was good!
Keep writting!
Shanan-cat!