Word Catcher

Kollox ghandu x'jaqsam ma' qaghda tar-ruh. Minkejja xi nuqqasijiet teknici li bi zmien ghad jigu rizolti, din it-tfajla qed turi car li taf tohrog b'versi hergin minn qiegh qalbha u certament minghajr sforzi. Nifrah b'poetessa Maltija gdida fostna li diga' qed turi hakma tabilhaqq eccellenti fuq l-ilsien Ingliz.

Hi!
To start off, I want to tell you how amazing this poem is. I was fascinated all the way through and I think you should definitely continue writing poetry like this. You have a very definitive writing style and it's spectacular.
In the first stanza, I don't feel like "flow" and "tottering" go well together in the first line. They aren't necessarily opposites, but they are descriptive of actions that are not alike. I'm not sure if you wanted the poem like this, but I think if you want a strong opening one of those words needs to change.
I think the rest of the first stanza is actually superb, though. Your word choice is phenomenal and I understand that this may have been done intentionally for the subject of this poem, but I would also like to say that it doesn't feel intentional. This poem feels effortless and natural and I love that about it.
Actually, I'd like to extend my last comment to the rest of the poem because you really did an amazing job with your word choice and lexicon and I'm highly impressed by it. I do think you should change the punctuation on the third line of the second stanza where it says "words which are pounding harder./Too desperate to emerge..." because ending it on a period is too forced of a stop and your flow in this poem is disrupted by it. I think you should change the period to a semicolon instead.
The third stanza, although I love your words, is a bit confusing and too abstract compared to the rest of the poem. There are two images that I see clearly: the ink and the soul being fed. Other than that, this stanza is lost. There is nothing tethering the reader to the poem here and a loss of meaning happens here.
I like the similes you use and the figurative language in general and I think you have a good grasp on how to use that type of language effectively.
One thing I have to comment on is the soft rhyme you try to use whenever you're rhyming "wind" with something else. Both times, the rhyme has been ineffective. I actually didn't know that you had a rhyme scheme until I got through the third stanza and realized that some words rhymed. Also, the fifth stanza does not have a rhyme scheme and it's off-putting when the rest of the poem follows that pattern. I'm not sure if it's necessarily a bad thing, though. Just a tiny bit of different can work wonders on a poem. I like the first and third lines in that stanza, but the "wind" and "mind" part is what is keeping it from being amazing.
I loved the way you ended this poem. It felt gradual but intense and I was very satisfied by the last line. On one level I felt like it came full circle, although I don't really know why, and on another I felt like something was resolved.
Overall, you are an amazing writer and I loved this poem. There are a few instances where you could work to make it even more wonderful, but those decisions are up to you to make.
Keep writing and good luck,
Dianne E.C.E.

YAY Stanzas! <3 I love poetry with stanzas.

First of all if you need help with spacing out the poetry this post will help: How to format your poetry on YWS

Secondly I'm going to go through each stanza and give you tips, and then lastly I'm going to do an overall. : ) Okay, here we go.

Words flow like tottering wind

Sometimes stutter whirling around flaws

And like the relief of a breeze after a searing grind,

Words undo my buckles seizing me from draws.

This seems to be an interesting opinion on semantics, an often scorned facet of human intelligence, fousing mainly on double meanings. The authoer seems to be speaking of how they found themselves with words that they couldnt release through oratory skills and so instead found an outlet in creative literation. And I must say you do use the english language rather effectively. In the last stanza you state that it is difficult to comprehend the contradictory meanings of words saying "which can be tough to break through". This line sort of introduces an unwelcome break in cadence to me so I would suggest that you hande it more industriously with "which can be tough to peorce" or something else that removes the essentiality of break through. Other than that it is a very interesting piece. I like how you speak of how the only way to use a word is with attention to context. Keep writing

Hey! Wisegirl22 here for a review.

First of all, I think this doesn't look quite right. Please explain what you mean by this phrase.

"Sometimes stutter whirling around flaws"

And there should be a comma between "buckles" and "seizing".

"Words undo my buckles seizing me from draws."

I think there should be a comma after "still".

"Still words are my longing expressed through the ink"

The first and third lines do not rhyme when you say them out loud, neither do the second and fourth lines. Can you replace it with something? If not, it's fine.

"Like a feather carried off by the wind

Exposed to the whirling and whooshing

Words tumble off lightly too fast to reassemble; they bind.

Forming words with different meanings creating new leadings."

Again, these lines do not rhyme.

"Tormenting me with the idea of chasing the wind."

"from this infusion of collisions flares a spark in my mind."

Wait, so you go from formal, expressing your love for words vividly, to abbreviations? Not matching, kiddo. (You aren't a kid, but whatevs. )

"Cause determination is what fuels my soul"

This was great, though, and the ending was awesome. Blunt, but awesome. The whole idea probably describes me as well. I really liked this! Byezeez!

-wisegirl22