Throughout the years
of strife and war,
Old Glory flew,
with never a quaver
She saw generals
barking orders,
But still she flew,
with never a waver
Through the nightmares
of millions of soldiers,
Still she stood,
with never a falter
As the new dawn
of her nation shone,
Still she stood,
as strong as ever
The old nation is no more;
we've dawned a new era
But through the early morning mists,
we see a New Glory
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Okay, edits made! ^_^
Thanks, all! =D
Good question! I'm glad you asked that, Purple =) You may or may not know, but Old Glory is the American Flag. So basically, it's saying that we're a new nation, with a New Glory. (She has come a long way!) I guess she kind of is. Partly because of the state of the nation, I think.
Tayla- I'll fix those =) Thanks for pointing them out! ^_^
Thanks, Shakyll =) She definitely does!
hmm...i love it.
But I do agree with Tayla, about the line of generals barking orders. Might want to edit a little. But I love it!!! America definitely deserves our poems.
Wow, this was really good. I really liked the emotion and the message you so clearly conveyed through you poetry
You did a really great job on this piece of poetry! It really makes the patriot in everyone come out, lol
~Tayla
I have never been a patriotic person, but this poem made me want to be. You had good immigry with very few words. I don't see anything that really needs editing.
I'm just curious, what is the new glory (if it's baced on real life)?
And one more comment. I don't know if you were trying for this, but New/Old Glory seemed really sad. I can't say why but it felt like she was watching over with a tear running down her cheek.
Over all, really good! Keep writing!
--Bee--