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Hello! I like the theme of this poem, of the importance of unknown things, and not needing a strict definition for your life.

I like the repetition in the first two stanzas, of the structure and certain words. It helps the flow of the poem, and it helps to establish the meaning. But I think the repetition might be overused. The word "question" is used four times in the first two stanzas, and three of the lines in the first stanza are repeated exactly in the second stanza. Too much repetition can take away from the poem's message, and the second stanza adds less to the poem, which makes it less interesting to read.

The way you explain the concept of "what's" works very well. The idea is made clear without being directly explained, and I especially like the metaphors of "working parts" and "turning the page." But I think this line could be made more clear: "You're not made out of any of those things." It might help to specify what "those things" refers to, so that the message is easier to understand.

I think the fourth stanza doesn't flow as well as the first three. It gives a direct explanation of the concept and how the narrator feels about it. In particular, the first and third line feel more like prose than poetry. I think it would be more meaningful if you show how you arrive at the conclusion that strict definitions aren't necessary, rather than just stating the conclusion.

I think the last stanza doesn't close the poem as strongly as it could. The quote takes up most of the conclusion, and I think it would be better if the conclusion were in your words. Also, the last line is a common sentiment, and I think using it to conclude the poem takes away from the poem's originality.

Overall, I think the poem does a good job of communicating a strong message on an interesting subject. I enjoyed reading it. Keep writing!

Hi there! So first off I really loved this poem. It really captures the reader and gets them thinking. I really appreciate that in your poem, you make the reader question themselves. It's almost like a cheer that every person needs in their life to keep going.

I really enjoyed this poem a lot. It wasn't sugar coated, it wasn't about being nice. It was to get people to wake up and reevaluate. I thank you for that, because I think we all need that from time to time. I did. I think it flowed very well, and the grammar was spot on.

I think the one thing I will say is, I don't quite understand why you used "&" to break up each stanza. I think with every word having so much depth, the "&" took away from that a little bit.

Hey there music! (Thanks for the like).


First off, this is a wonderfully thought out poem that makes the reader want to sit down, pose like the thinker, and ponder the questions of the universe.

Absolutely no grammar, spelling, or punctuation mistakes. You were quite thorough.

Overall, I'd say 9/10 stars.

Cheers!

~Swiftfur