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The Prime Control Chapter 11: The Order Takes Action

by keeperofgaming

Published June 3, 2024

16+ Violence

In The Prime Control

Warning: This work has been rated 16+ for violence.

“You called?”

I stood in Morgan’s palace, the woman on the throne smiling sweetly but menacingly.

“Yes, I want to know what exactly happened a few days ago. You and numerous other humans entered my forest, then after going to a lake, you disappeared for hours, before reappearing again.”

“Didn’t Maven tell you?”

“Yes, but I don’t believe your little talking rock story, also, Wings, I am not happy about you telling that story to him.”

“Please, it’s just as much my story as it is yours, I can tell whoever the heck I want.”

The Lady of the Lake, Taurael was lounging on my head. She had no more fear of Morgan, after all, Morgan couldn’t use her name to control her anymore… of course, Morgan had no knowledge of this.

“My, Wings, you are getting quite feisty, do you need a reminder of who rules you right now?”

Me.

“Of course, I don’t, Morgan, but I am still the Lady of the Lake, so I can tell my story if I so wish.”

Morgan sighed.

“Fair, I suppose.”

Morgan stood and walked over to me.

“So? Answer, what did you actually do?”

“As Maven told you, we spoke to a magic stone that… didn’t tell us much at all.”

Morgan sighed.

“The worst part about this is that I can tell you are telling the truth.”

“See?”

“I suppose that there could be a… magical talking rock, but I’d need to meet it.”

“I don’t know if she would want to meet you.”

Morgan smiled.

“I see, also, I want to let you know that Mordred is a major threat, do avoid him if at all possible in the future.”

“That’s the plan.”

“Good, he seems interested in you, oddly enough.”

“Maybe he recognized that I was collared.”

The snap caused Morgan to twitch.

“I’d assume the rock informed you of that?”

“Yep.”

She sighed.

“My reasons are my own, but yes, until I know how dangerous you are, I’m keeping you collared.”

“Because of my magic?”

“Because you are the first human with enough magic to kill a demon, and yes, I know you didn’t just scare it away.”

“Didn’t-“

“Yes he did, but that was with a combination of sword and magic. Besides, not only were you able to do that with only magic, but you then were blessed by the dream, all this while you are still developing your magic. Having a collar only makes sense.”

“Why?”

“Because, to put it frankly, I have reason to suspect that you are hiding something from me. There is no way you beat a demon with fire alone. While it is possible, you would’ve been a lot more burnt.”

“That makes sense, tell you what, you tell me what you’re hiding from me about me, and I tell you what I’m hiding from you.”

Morgan smiled.

“You’re beginning to understand our ways. It’s almost like watching an infant learning to speak.”

Then she stood.

“I have no need to explain my piece, thus you have none either. Now, thank you for the report, go back to… whatever you humans do.”

“Yes ma’am.”

I walked out and the doors opened.

As I walked back,

“She’s getting worried.”

I smiled.

“She is. She’s slowly losing control of us, and she is realizing it.”

“She will strike at us eventually.”

“And we’ll be ready when she does.”

“You know, she is listening to us.”

“I am aware.”

I smiled at the Spriggan’s aura which got startled and returned to the palace.

Taury sighed.

“You need a magic teacher.”

“I mean, you’re not bad.”

“Yeah, but I can only teach you elemental, there are plenty of neutral magics that I can’t teach you anything about.”

“Like?”

“Well, projection, for one. You can do it, but not at will. You need to learn how to do it. There are many others, like illusion magic. You could conceal your aura and even make yourself look like a fey or someone else.”

“Wow… could Alvane teach me?”

“No, the knights don’t like the neutral magics. Neither do I, really, but you need any tool you can have.”

“Simial uses illusion.”

“As I said before, if it was up to him, he’d simply kill any human that got near, it’s likely that he developed the illusion just for the purposes of protecting the lake.”

We walked further and found something strange.

“Uhm… that’s disturbing.”

A girl was hanging upside down, she was entirely green, likely rotting in the front.

“What happened there?”

“Should we take her down…?”

“Yeah.”

I reached for the rope.

“Hello!”

“GYAH!”

I jumped back and Taury latched onto my head as we both yelped in shock. The girl spoke.

“Come on, I smelled you, let me down.”

“What?”

“What?”

Taury’s eyes dawned in understanding.

“She’s a goblin, she’s not rotting.”

“What, you thought I was rotting cause I’m green?”

I winced.

“Kinda?”

“Heh, that’s funny. Could you help me down now?”

The goblin spun around, and aside from the pointed ears and… green skin, she looked exactly like a human.

“Um, sure.”

I untied the rope and she fell.

She stood up.

“You’re a human, aren’t you?”

“I am.”

“Cool, but your magic is intense.”

“Okay?”

“Hm, is that pixie for sale?”

“WHAT? No!”

“Oh, okay, no lunch for me I guess.”

“HEH?!”

Taury sighed.

“Goblins will eat anything, I’m not really surprised, but no, I’m not for sale.”

“Oh…”

The goblin smiled.

“Yeah… do you have any body parts you don’t need, I’m sure that what I don’t eat will go into my experiments.”

“Experiments?”

“Oh, yeah, I’m a scientist.”

“A scientist? For magic?”

“Of course!”

“… Do you know neutral magics?”

“Yes?”

“Could you teach me?”

The Goblin thought for a moment.

“Tell you what, you get me a book I’ve been looking for, and I’ll teach you.”

“What book?”

Universe in a Nutshell both parts.”

“Sure?”

“Yeah, I need to see how human theory works with mine, but I can’t enter a library… for obvious reasons.”

“Regular people can see you?”

“Of course, goblins and kobolds are some of the few races that would need to use illusion magic to not be detected, and goblins are resistant to magic, meaning that I’d still be green, even with magic.”

“Huh, yeah, I can get you that book.”

“Nice. Meet me through the nexus.”

“You are from a different realm?”

“Nope, I simply have a nexus point, like Morgan.”

“How do I get there?”

“Look for Dee’s realm.”

Then she walked off.

“So… Dee?”

Taury sighed.

“Honestly, this isn’t much of a problem, goblins are simple beings, and they would definitely use a lot of neutral magic, not to mention, if she’s a scientist, she may be able to figure out how to fix your problem.”

“Maybe.”

“Well, let’s get the book.”

“Nice, so, to the library?”

“No, I don’t have a card.”

“So…”

“We’re gonna buy it.”

_

I was walking through the bookstore and looked through the science section. I couldn’t find it.

“Pardon me, ma’am, do you know where the Universe in a Nutshell is?”

The lady looked at me with a bored look.

“I don’t know, do I?”

“So, you don’t?”

“If it’s not in the sci-fi section, we don’t got it.”

“It… it’s not a sci-fi book.”

“It’s not? Sounds like one, well if it’s not in the fantas-“

“Could you please check the computer?”

“… Fine…”

She rolled her eyes and scrolled through the computer.

“Okay, it’s in the clearance section.”

“Nice. Thank you.”

The lady blinked and rolled her eyes again before scrolling on her phone again.

I walked over to the clearance section and found it.

“Well, that was kind of easy.”

Then I heard a gasp and a click.

“William Cambell, come with me or die.”

I froze, the metal of the gun on the back of my head.

“And you are?”

“None of your business.”

From what I could tell from the voice and the reflections, it was a female assailant, and she was masked. Given her nonresponse to Taury, she had no relic.

I walked where she guided.

Then I saw three more masked guys in front of a black truck.

“Put him in.”

Then I went into the truck.

The gun never leaving my head, the girl followed me in.

“So, who do you work for?”

“None of your business.”

“Mercenaries?”

“None of your business. Shut up.”

With a gun on my head, I wisely stayed silent.

Taury had a deathlook.

“William, a single word and I’ll kill all of them.”

“Don’t, I’m curious. If I’m about to die, or you’re in danger, then intervene.”

She wrinkled her nose, but she was unable to disobey. One of the few times I’d directly administer an order.

I sat there, waiting for the ride to finish.

“Come on, speed up, or GET OFF THE ROAD!!!”

The guy driving was yelling at people.

“Shut it, man, we’re trying to look intimidating.”

“This man is going 30… WE’RE IN A 50 ZONE!!!”

The guy honked three times. They were definitely not professionals.

If they were, they’d not have a vision constricting mask over their face while driving.

I had to use earth magic to stop the horrid amount of swerving.

Why couldn’t whoever wanted me kidnapped spring for actually good kidnappers?

After an hour, we stopped.

“Alright, now, get out.”

I slowly got out. The gun never leaving my head. The girl was the only one who had any experience, it seemed.

We were at the library.

The girl hid the gun in her sleeve, so now it only looked like she was holding her hand on my shoulder.

“Move.”

We entered and I spied a familiar face.

“Jones, you can’t invade my home, so you kidnap me, what fun.”

“That new resident of yours set up way too many security measures.”

“She is good at that.”

I smiled, Aoi was certainly a very experienced trapmaker.

“So, what is it that you want?”

“I need you to answer a few questions.”

“What are they?”

Jones smiled.

“I don’t think you figured it out yet. I don’t know why your pixie hasn’t lashed yet, but I’m taking advantage of that.”

A net launched and netted her.

I began to speak.

“Figh-“

Then I was clocked on the side of the head, and the world faded to black.

_

I woke up, my arms were bound and I saw two guards.

“He woke up.”

It was the girl who knocked me out.

“Well, you’re certainly prettier without the mask.”

“Hah, a flirt I see.”

I smiled.

“Guilty.”

Then Brent walked in and both saluted.

“Jones did it again. Sorry man, Jones gave an order, and… well I can’t just deny his orders.”

“You’re good, do you know what they did with Wings?”

The girl snapped.

“She’s dead.”

I snorted.

“Please, if she was dead…”

I smiled.

I’d know, and not a single one of you would still be alive.”

Brent shivered.

“Yeah… I know, that’s why I convince Jones not to hurt her at all.”

“Thanks.”

“Yeah, besides, I’d feel bad if she got hurt, and not only for your sake.”

I smiled.

“Why do you care for those insects, sir?”

Brent turned.

“Because those ‘insects’ have saved me quite a few times, Cina. Your job is to guard him, not ask questions.”

“Sorry, sir.”

Brent left the room and locked it. Even if he was my friend, he was still an Order officer. He couldn’t just drop everything and free me.

The other guard was also a girl. She seemed younger.

“So, how’s your day today?”

She looked at me and smiled.

“None of your business, bug lover.”

I blinked. Then she turned.

“Did I do it correctly?”

“You did awesome.”

Oh… she didn’t have her own idea, she must be a new employee,

“You should meet some fey, they can be quite friendly.”

Then I realized something.

“Hey, aren't you in my history class?”

She blinked then grimaced.

“Yes, I saw the lake. I know it wasn’t a bear. If fey can do that, then I wanted to fight against them.”

I smiled in a dark way.

“Oh, please. No fey did that… the fey were the targets there.”

Both guards blinked.

“Why are you talking like you know what happened?”

“Because I was at the lake shortly after the massacre, Me and that pixie killed the two fiends that did it.”

She shuddered.

“That’s… that’s how you know what you saw could do worse?”

“The thing that hurt me back then was of the same species as the ones that did the lake. They are the threats, not fey. Some fey, definitely threatening, but those things are far greater threats.”

The first girl snapped.

“Too bad, right now, you’re the threat we’re dealing with. And I don’t like your earlier threat when Brent was in here.”

“Trust me, that was quite necessary. I was letting Brent know to insist to Jones that nothing happens.”

I smiled.

I realized that I needed to get out of here. Taury, while being safe, was probably not happy.

The older one walked out.

“Be sure to keep an eye, but don’t worry, he’s strong, but he’s not breaking out of that.”

Of course, this would have been true… had I not been using a slight amount of fire magic the entire time on the lock. I could easily break out.

The girl left and the other one looked at me.

“So… has that pixie always been with you?”

I smiled.

“Adeline, right?”

“Yep.”

“Yeah, she’s been with me since a little before orientation.”

“Wow… She’s been there for a while then…”

“Yeah, she also laughed during the Arthur lesson the other day.”

“Why?”

“Because it was really historically inaccurate.”

“Well, the whole story probably is.”

I smiled.

“Actually, it’s not as much as you’d think. That pixie is the Lady of the Lake.”

She snorted.

“Really? That’s a bad lie.”

“It’s not a lie, she forged Excalibur and everything.”

“Please, it’s obviously just a story.”

“Who’s the number one enemy of the Order?”

“Morgan…”

“Morgan Lefaye.”

She blinked.

“Holy crap, how did I not make that connection?!”

“People usually don’t, but yeah, you know that story I told at the camp?”

“Yeah?”

“That was pretty much the story.”

“… Woah…”

“Yep.”

She was in thought.

“So… does that mean that Mordred is real?”

“Yep, in fact, he was in party with the two that caused the lake.”

“Woah… and the beast?”

“The seeming leader of the fiends as of now.”

“Woah…”

I smiled and she leaned closer.

“Sorry ‘bout this.”

She tilted her head.

“Control.”

Her eyes flashed white.

“What is it you need, master?”

“You will give me the keys, but, by your account, I sped past you, grabbing your keys, and knocking you down.”

“Yes master.”

“Are there any cameras here?”

“No, there is no cameras in the torture chamber.”

Torture chamber… yikes.

“Good, hand me the keys.”

She handed them over.

“Are there any mics?”

“No, what would you like me to do?”

“Lean against the wall.”

Then she leaned… wrong way.

“Other way! Other way!”

I was not that kind of guy.

She spun and put her back on the wall.

“Now sit down.”

“Yes master.”

She sat down and I unlocked the door, left, and locked it behind me.

“Release.”

“Crap, that was fast. How did he…? LET ME OUT!”

“Sorry, got to go!”

I ran, using my connection to Taury to track her.

I went down stairs and up halls, running past many people, getting a lot of followers.

“I’ve never been so popular.”

A siren sounded.

Then, the experienced girl, her blond hair whipping, shot after me, her speed was comparable with a demon.

I dodged and leapt into the rafters before using earth magic to propel me.

I spun and kicked at her, but she dodged and threw me into a wall.

Everyone else lost track of us, so it was a minor skirmish between us two.

“You won’t escape. When I bring you back in, I’ll finally get Jones to do what he should have done ages ago, kill that stupid pixie and hang you for your traitorous cruelty.”

“Well, aren’t you charming.”

I leapt up and kicked her side, launching her to the wall.

“Sorry, but I gotta save my friend.”

She slammed me into the ground and flipped, I recognized that style.

“One of Saiyung’s huh?”

She flinched.

“How’d you know?”

“Because I’m also one of her students. I’m the old man’s grandson.”

She smiled.

“Well, that’s interesting.”

She launched at me, and I deflected before snatching her leg and twisting her over my back, slamming her into the ground.

She backed up and decided to get far back to get a better look.

Then I was right next to her, a kick to her stomach.

She coughed and looked at me. Then she pulled out a knife and stabbed at me. Then a gun.

“I’m not letting you win.”

“Alright alright…”

I raised my hands… I could beat a knife, but a gun was a bit much.

Then… I felt what she wanted… not to hurt me, but to learn.

Then a new word came through me.

“Direct.”

Her eyes glowed a brighter white than ever before. She shook and dropped the gun, she fell to her knees and groaned before the light faded. Then she looked at me.

“Hello, Darling.”

“Heh?”

She tackled me. Sitting up with her legs on either side of me, a hold, she spoke sensually.

“My, another student? I thought I was the only one in town. Tell you what… I help you save the little bug, then you give me whatever I ask for.”

“Uhm.”

This was odd.

“What happened?”

“I don’t know… it’s like I just suddenly noticed how hot you were?”

“Heh? Release…”

“Oh, is that what you want me to do? Why not, darling?”

She stood up and helped me up. I had no clue what was happening.

It was like control… if it was always on.

“Please help me find my friend.”

“Of course, then we can do whatever.”

“Heh?!”

This was weird… how did I turn it off?

The scary part was… it took a lot of power to do… but I wasn’t expending any power by ordering her now.

Did I actually put her under a permanent control?

I followed her through the facility.

Then we came to a door, which she held up a keycard to. I heard a beep and the door opened.

“Cina?”

A scientist gave a confused look as Cina entered with me behind her.

“Mrs. Callahan, we are here for the bug.”

I winced.

“Pixie.”

“Yeah, the pixie.”

Mrs. Callahan gave a look of confusion.

Then I saw her… Taury, bound and gagged, with a syringe in her arm. Glowing blood in it.

I heard a snap.

What… happened here?

Cina and Mrs. Callahan shook.

“We… we… we-we-were going to experiment….”

With… her?

“Y-yes.”

My vision grew red.

Put the blood back in her and wake her up.

“Y-y-“

“Stop!”

I heard a bunch of clicks.

“Cina, what are you doing?!”

“Um, J-Jones. Fancy seeing you here.”

Cina was clearly caught off guard, so was Jones to see her helping me. But I was still angry.

You… you did this.

The gunman shook. Adeline dropped her gun in fear.

“She’s not waking up…”

Callahan squeaked.

Jones, you have five seconds to explain, before I kill every person in this facility.

Jones shook with fear. He felt the threat… more than that, he knew I was capable of following through.

“We… needed her blood so we could study pixie magic.”

Did she agree?

“N-no.”

My aura shook.

Then why did you do it anyways?

Brent rushed in.

“William, calm down. Jones, I told you it would be a bad idea and you did it anyways.”

He turned to me.

“William, calm down, most of the people had no clue he was doing that. You don’t need to lash out.”

Brent’s words calmed me. It was obvious that he was as unaware as I was.

Jones seemed to finally understand why Brent was cautious around me.

“Calm down, Wings is fine, right?”

I nodded.

“Good, then she will eventually wake up, let’s remain calm and not angry.”

“*Sigh*… You’re right…”

I looked over at Taury, picking her up before glaring at the scientist. She twitched in fear.

Brent looked at Cina.

“By the way, what happened?”

“I… don’t actually know.”

Cina smiled.

“I don’t know what happened either, but it’s like I see him in a whole new light.”

I sighed.

“Alright, do you need to keep with the guns up?”

Brent looked at Jones.

“… Fine… Men, put down the guns.”

Brent looked triumphant.

“See? Talking peacefully works.”

Jones sighed.

“Fine, sit down, then we can talk.”

I looked at him, then the guys around us, then back to him.

“No, because I don’t trust you. And I am somewhat aware of what you’re capable of, and if that…”

He pointed at Cina.

“…is an example of what you can do? I don’t want to be alone with you anytime soon.”

Brent looked at me.

“That is fair.”

“Fine.”

I sat down and so did Jones.

“Now… what happened to Cina?”

“I do not know.”

Brent looked at me.

“You don’t know? How?”

“I just don’t, it’s like a supercharged version of what I can normally do.”

Then… I realized exactly how I was able to do that.

“Pardon me… what is in those cases?”

Jones spoke.

“Dead fey that couldn’t last our experiments. We use their bodies as fuel for the facility.”

“… That’s why.”

“What?”

Because of your monstrous *BREATHE* Because of you burning fey… magic is far more prevalent here. So, my regular power was severely boosted.”

Jones shook.

“Oh…”

Then, I heard a sound that terrified me. A voice.

“Oh, Little Licky… There you are.”

“What was that?!”

Brent, Jones, and everyone else froze.

“Get everyone out of the facility.”

“What?”

NOW!

I held Taury and reached to Brent.

“Take her to safety, and do not let him touch her.”

He took her with a confused look.

“What’s happening?”

“No time to explain, I’ll hold him back as long as I can. Cina, go with them.”

“Understood.”

Jones stood.

“We can help.”

“No, you’d be more in the way than anything.”

“We have firepower.”

“If that was effective, I wouldn’t be so scared.”

My serious glare made him falter.

“Fine. Move out!”

“No, you don’t.”

The shadow was already there. Brent froze, instantly recognizing him as a demon.

I stepped between the demon and the force.

“Get lost.”

“Awe, Little Licky, why are you so shy? Don’t you want to introduce me?”

“Sure, I’ll be like, ‘Here’s this fancy rock.’”

The Hunter cackled.

“That’s a good one, I should take it. ‘Look, a silly child’s heart.’”

“Mine’s better.”

He smiled before laughing.

“Oh, Little Licky, you’re so funny.”

“Why are you here?”

“Why wouldn’t I? Wouldn’t you expect me to be after you?”

“I thought that you’d send another goon.”

“Oh no, those act on their own, I’m a bit wiser, I waited for the Lady to sleep before I struck, she would be a threat.”

“And I wouldn’t?”

The fiend laughed.

“Little Licky, of course you’re a threat, I thought that collar of the Matron told you that much.”

I grimaced.

“Leave now…”

“Or what, Little Licky, I am greater than both the Lady and the Matron. What hope do you have?”

I smiled.

“I may not win, but I can certainly do a number on you.”

He snickered again.

“Oh, Little Licky, you can’t do anything to me.”

He rushed forward and slashed my chest, making me cough out blood.

“Little Licky, you’re so weak.”

He grabbed my face and threw me into the table where I was sitting before.

It broke in two and the demon put a knee on my throat.

“So… so weak… I’ll end your pity. Hm… how to do that?”

He leaned over.

“I know, I’ll turn you into my kin… what fun!”

Then the demon smiled.

“Three.”

The demon raised its brow.

“Two.”

The Hunter gave a confused look.

“One.”

Jones averted his eyes.

“Boom baby.”

I flashed a large amount of pixie dust, forcing the Hunter to yelp and launch back.

Then, he saw what he needed.

He launched at Brent and snatched Taury before Brent could guard.

He held a claw to her throat.

“Stop, submit, or watch her die. I’m sure you noticed, I have no interest in having you die, but I wouldn’t mind her dying, it would certainly be easier on me.”

I stood.

Let… her… go…

“No~”

CONTROL! GHK!”

“Awe, what’s wrong, did you actually think you could defeat my will?”

I collapsed, coughing out blood, even with my increased power, the Hunter was far beyond any other that I fought before.

He grabbed me with one hand and slammed me against the wall. Taury in his other hand

“For a human, you are powerful, understandable considering your heritage, but that man isn’t here. You’ll be very useful as a demon.”

I smiled.

“What makes you happy?”

“Fun fact I learned a while ago.”

The Hunter raised a brow.

“Pixies are heat resistant.”

His eyes widened as I grabbed his throat back.

“Burn in hell.”

Then a flame spire, in the condensed room.

Brent and Jones slammed the doors shut as everyone made it out.

So… in that condensed room. In a facility where magic was supercharged…

The fiend screeched in agony.

I also roared in pain. The fire still hurt me, and I had a lot of it released.

The Hunter dropped Taury on the warping floor and grabbed me, throwing me through the wall and shattered me into the hallway.

He stepped out, absolute fury in his eyes.

“You… you… I’ll remember that…”

Then a flash of light. Then he screeched.

“Will you, Hunter?”

Taury stood, covered in flame. Her clothes somewhat burnt.

“Ah, dear lady… It’s fun to see you awake. I’m ticked off now, so I’m done playing.”

He and Taury launched and clashed.

Brent rushed over and grabbed me before yelping, his hands were singed.

My body was still radiating the spire. I couldn’t stop it.

“Run…”

“Not without you.”

“I’m sorry…”

“What?”

“Control.”

Brent’s eyes glowed.

“What do you need, master?”

“Go with Jones and release outside of the facility.”

His will struggled, but merely fluttered.

“Understood, master.”

Jones looked at me.

“Thank you.”

Then he and Brent ran with the rest of their men, Cina included.

I watched as Taurael and the Hunter grappled. Their power clashing.

Then Brent released and I smiled.

“Let’s burn.”

Then I used the rest of my magic and bottomed my soul.

And created such an inferno, that no one could have survived.

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Ravena wrote a review Review · Jun 4, 2024

Hello Again, My Friend!

It's me, Raven, and I'd like to review the next chapter in this great story using my Familiar method! Let's dive in, shall we? Heh heh heh...

What The Black Eyes See...

Wow, what a way to kick off the next volume! That talk with Morgan was awesome; the pleasantries on the surface catch us up on where she lies in this whole situation, but the subtext feels so aggressive. Then, moving on to Jones's ambush, it really felt like this chapter displayed how dangerous his group is -something I was curious about, given how Jones has been so easily beaten and Brent befriended up until this point. And from there, so many shocking twists and turns that have me excited and baffled -in a good way! Let's get into the details though.

Where The Dagger Points...

No complaints! good writing job ~

Why The Grin Widened...

So as I mentioned, the way you opened this chapter was great. Finally seeing Morgan ask this one question...

“Yes, I want to know what exactly happened a few days ago. You and numerous other humans entered my forest, then after going to a lake, you disappeared for hours, before reappearing again.”


Oooou, she knows there's more to the situation, even after hearing William's explanation. So tense! I will say, her reasoning for the collar -as inhumane of an act as it is- do seem reasonable, implying that she may not be doing it entirely out of spite, and even if she is, there is room for redemption. In the meantime, it was really cool to see Taury and William say this...

“She is. She’s slowly losing control of us, and she is realizing it.”

“She will strike at us eventually.”


Knowing Morgan is listening, for them to say something like that, it really shows how much more confident they are -and for good reason! You really get a feel for the power they've both gained and continue to hone, so much that even Morgan may not be able to overpower them for much longer (I think).

Cina and Adeline were fascinating characters! Cina being a student of Saiyung was unexpected, but it does explain that awesome fight scene between her and William! And I also really enjoyed getting to read Adeline's perspective, as a student that was pushed to join this fey-hating group.

“Yes, I saw the lake. I know it wasn’t a bear. If fey can do that, then I wanted to fight against them.”


I guess it was to be expected that at least one student would realize that one bear couldn't cause so much of a bloodbath, but it was nonetheless a surprise. And her pinning it all on fey was sad to see, but understandable, and it makes you really hope that she'll come to see reason on the matter. Especially since it seems like William made some decent progress by making her realize the connection between the King Arthur story, his own story, and the characters at play here.

But of course, for all the hope you gain for the individual characters like her, this facility was enough to give me chills. Even the little details, like this:

Torture chamber… yikes.


Um...is that really necessary, Jones??

Again, the fight with Cina was incredible, and I also liked the escape and chase sequence in the hallways. The "I've never been so popular" quip also made me laugh. Then, the new command came up, and wow!

Did I actually put her under a permanent control?


That was a shock, and so was...

“Dead fey that couldn’t last our experiments. We use their bodies as fuel for the facility.”


WOW. Permanent control being an option anywhere, with enough power, is a wild enough development. But how it got to this point? Where that extra power came from? Oh, that's so nasty and tragic!

...but the horror writer in me loves it >:D

The ambush from the Hunter, with Taury down, provided yet another great fight to keep tensions high. I loved the taunting, the vicious attacks, and this:

I collapsed, coughing out blood, even with my increased power, the Hunter was far beyond any other that I fought before.


The Hunter being immune to the "control" command makes sense, and it made the fight that much more gritty. As William starts exerting fire, Taury wakes up, and there's a command for everyone to leave, leaving the fight -and this whole chapter- off on this note...

And created such an inferno, that no one could have survived.


Oooou, what a cliffhanger!

Our Mad Thoughts...

Overall, another great chapter, nicely done! :D

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creeperfeverdreams wrote a review Review · Jun 4, 2024

Hello there, human! I'm reviewing using the YWS S'more Method today!

Shalt we commence with the mutated S’more?

Top Graham Cracker - William and Taury get kidnapped by the Order, Taury is almost used as an experiment, William directs a possibly permanent Control order on Cina, demons almost killed him and Taury, and…will the goblin ever get her book?

Slightly Burnt Marshmallow - This chapter is fine, I like this chapter.

Chocolate Bar - I love how I got to see the Order in action! There’s been talk of how powerful the Order is, but now I get to see it. :> I got nervous for quite a bit, thinking that maybe William and Taury wouldn’t survive, but they did!

Closing Graham Cracker - The demons are hot on their trail, Morgan seems to be catching onto William’s power, and the Order…the Order might strike again. Or maybe they’ll be on William’s side after this, who knows?

I wish you a lovely day/night! ^v^



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