he says not to worry
and then reads me a passage
of romeo and juliet.
.
i can't help but fall for him
harder and harder, listening to him
say "wherefore" is enough
for me to die of romance.
.
i daydream of wrapping my arm
around his shoulder and holding him like i'm
gripping onto a rope, climbing.
.
sometimes, his breath is short
and words are blunt. another slip up,
he claims, but i swear
i almost heard him say
he loved me.
.
i'm too young to know
anything yet, but this is
almost as heavenly as clinging
onto an angel.
.
gripping his wings
as he laughs, sighing as
he looks at me, yearning for
him to just tell me those three words.
.
sailing through his aquamarine eyes,
running through his wheat field hair
and the dip and curve of his shoulders.
.
spectating as he tells me
the meaning of life, he sits there as i
contemplate love and ethics.
.
i told him that all someone
had to do to take my heart was
to give me a sweet, and he said
that he'd bake me a cake,
his specialty.
.
he's already taken my heart,
but i think that would seal the deal.
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Beautifully tender, romantic and youthful. It feels like this poem captures the intensity of a first love. The reference to Shakespeare's Romeo and Juliet in the first stanza kind of leads me to believe this love ended/will end tragically. There is a warmth in the poem, shared moments between two people who are just forming a connection, and it creates a dreamlike tone.
this may be me reading too much into it, but with these lines:
The speaker says all they need to fall in love is a sweet, yet the man says he will bake her a cake. In my country, we wouldn't describe a cake as the same as sweets (haribo etc) and so to me, it felt as though he was promising her something more, a large act of romance, but it's not actually what she asked for. Like love bombing or promising too much that he won't be able to deliver. This may just be what i interpreted and not your original intent!
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Ohhh...First love is a memory that stays hidden in the heart, a soft and sweet whisper that never fades. It begins with a first crush, a fleeting feeling that makes the heart flutter at the sight of someone special. Every glance, every smile, every little touch feels magical, as if time stands still. But with that magic comes a quiet fear—the fear of not being able to speak the three words that hold so much weight. We wonder, as time passes, if life would have been different if we had only said them. Yet, those moments remain etched in our minds, a sweet, secret memory that we hold dear. Though the words may have gone unspoken, the feeling of first love stays with us, forever a precious, unspoken treasure that only we truly understand.