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I have to say this was pretty silly, but it did put a smile on my face. I imagine a very tired, overworked writer putting these disconnected thoughts on paper and finding in the morning, "Wow, that really accurately describes what I'm going through right now!" It also reminded me of Amelia Bedelia books I read when I was young when she went around putting dust on the furniture when she was told to dust it. The lack of proper capitalization also reiterates the sleep deprived writer as the person tries to get their notes down on paper in a rush before something else sweeps them into the next activity. Well written. Much enjoyed!
Omg, I thought of Amerlia Bedelia too! XD
LOL!!!
Witty, funny, fresh and complete, this poem was a delight to read!
First, I do understand the tiredness that can lead to the creation of those images but, the way you expressed them, first slow then frantically, gave a wonderful sense of completeness. My favorite line among all this chaos was "tell me, when i am allowed to polish my coffee mug and pretend it's a lake?" - the way small becomes big in this whole too tidy environment.
I think you could have gone even further with the chaos. Interchanged images and expressions did it for me but... but what about going into the grammar or words themselves. Create, assemble two words to make one. Destroy usual grammar (though, the non-use of punctuation was a great choice) because it is fun and you could have!
Eager to see what wits you can come up with next!