Alone Today

thankyou

I'm so sorry if i gave you the impression i THOUGHT you were an angry person in general. I just meant for that song i can tell you were angry. Just don't hold back, is my point. With any emotion you put in writing a song. Go all out.

thanks for your feedback. i don't think i am an angry person, it's just that when i am angry i write a song to make myself feel better. that's why my songs seem angry

I forgot to mention what I liked about this piece, I apologize.
I love your rhyming, its not a simple "I'm on a boat, i like to float, gimme a coat, bro" Its flowy and intricate and enjoyable.
Thanks(:

I commented on your other piece. I beleie it was yours, anyway.

Each piece of work shows a bit about the writers self. Even popular songs that are bought by washed up singers, they are still a glimpse into the soul. I can tell you're angry. Seems rather deppresing, but in music you have to convey why you being pissed of at the world is different from everyone else. What if i said the same thing with different wording, the piece isn't yours unless it has you personality in it. This one has a lot more of you in it from you other piece but I want to hear something soulfull. And as your audience I believe that what I want is pretty important(;

You're a good writer, and you are showing yourself to the world.
Just don't hold back.

That is really good.

Hey,
I love this poem and I reckon that as a song it would be awesome too! I don't really have any suggestions, mainly just appreciation that you wrote it so I could read it Can't wait to read more of your work!
-Blossom xx

Sometimes everyone wants a piece
But there’s not enough to go round



I really liked this line. There are multiple meanings behind it, if you really think about it.
the whole song has a really good purpose. It's pretty creative ;D

I liked it. I've also felt like this before where everyone is pretty much surrounding you and you feel like you might suffocate. Just some suggestions I have for you.
Instead of saying 'coz' could you use 'cause? It's the same thing basically.
And on the last line:

Could everyone just leave me alone today

nice one. i love the lyrics. everything. it just get on my nerves...