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Poetry is from Maggie Stiefvater's "Linger."
REMASTERED! with few grammatical and punctuation corrections. Please tell me all if you like this way or the first way better. thanks!
Folded in my arms you are a butterfly in reverse,
Giving up your wings to deliver my curse
Your letting go of me.
Your letting go to
Sail to an island unknown,
Failing to find your way back home
Leagues beneath away from me.
All these perfect days, made of glass
Put on a shelf where they can cast
Perfect shadows that stretch and grow
On the perfect days down below.
TuckEr EllsworTh
Actually, yeah it doesn't make a huge difference so I would just leave it however you like
Ok here are the corrections you suggested. I dont think i like it any better but do tell me what you guys think
Folded in my arms you are a butterfly in reverse
Giving up your wings to deliver my curse
Your letting go of me.
Your letting to
Sail to an island unknown
Failing to find your way back home
Leagues beneath away from me.
All these perfect days, made of glass
Put on a shelf where they can cast
Perfect shadows that stretch and grow
On the perfect days down below.
TuckEr EllsworTh
Ok thanks for the suggestion! I'll figure something out
TuckEr EllsworTh
This is a really well-written poem! I really enjoyed it. The flow was good except it was sort of interupted at these two parts:
I understand that it was done purposely, so I wouldn't actually change it, but maybe see if you can make it flow a little better.
Otherwise it was really enjoyable