So this is a modification off of the Disney song "I won't say I'm in love". So I basically did the same thing with some slight variation and in the lines on the left i added in 9,8,9,10. And on the lines on the right i did 6, 8, 6, 8. So that with rhyming took a really long time to do lol. Anyways this poem really is not very good at all and i don't know how to make it any better. Well enjoy!!!!!!!
I thought my heart had learned its lesson,
from my terrible selection.
No man is worth the inconvenience.
Gotta find something with much more salience.
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I love how you used a different pattern on both sides
I love the syllable pattern, it just made me want to read it even more.
Great job.
Dogs!
I like this piece a lot! And I'm sorry for being such a Disney noob, but I haven't the song yet. Dx
Though it does read really well and I tried putting a tune to it and it sounded really great
It's cute and charming and based off something that is endearing to its listeners. Great job, Dogs. You've done me proud. Now keep the ink flowing!
Murtuza
Wow, this is AMAZING! This song has always been on the repeat on my Ipod! (Sad, yes I know I have Disney songs on my Ipod) It was artfully created and in some ways I almost like it better than the original. The flow was very sing-songy but also complicated and clever. Keep up the great work!
I looove that Disney song! But you know, your version's pretty stellar too. Definitely cute, I love doing stuff like this and it's always interesting to see what people come up with. The rhyme scheme of this, I believe, is kind of different from the actual song's, and that threw me off a little bit, but I still like this a lot.
Keep writing,
StoryWeaver13
I really really enjoyed reading this. I especially love the format you wrote it in. It catches the eye and makes the poem more enjoyable and fun.