Bye life

by dasiamari

Published February 12, 2010

In poems

Round and round I go
Back and forth
To and fro

Never stopping
Never talking

As life passes by
my life passes by
bye, bye life


:thud:

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fiction903
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fiction903 wrote a review Review · Feb 13, 2010

Round and round I go.
Back and forth,
To and fro,

Never stopping,
Never talking,

As life passes by, If I were you I would take out "As life passes by"
my life passes by,
bye, bye life.
I would change the endingIf I were you I would also add some
descriptions.
Have a good night . Fiction

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dasiamari
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dasiamari commented Comment · Feb 12, 2010

:xd:



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