*This story is underneath my folder titled “Zeze and Zuzu the clowns”. Gacha Club character designs are under my forum titled “My character designs<33[2]”. Enjoy!*
“Who knows when we’ll have another moment like this together? Just the two of us, with the piano.” Alessia said.
She and Erik were at the school dance, listening to the sweet piano play on. It was a warm moment, a beautiful moment. Even Andrea had a dancing partner, which made Alessia smile.
“Another moment? Together? Alessia, I…this has been nice, but I just want to do it one time.” Erik said.
Alessia blinked her eyes. She wasn’t quite sure that she understood him.
“What?” Alessia asked, unable to hide the bile in her voice.
“I…I said I only wanted this one time.”
“So this doesn’t mean anything to you?”
“Well, uh…no, not really.”
“You just wanted a partner?”
“Isn’t that what this is all about? You don’t actually care about this, do you?”
Alessia thought back to when she asked Erik if he wanted to go out to dance. He smiled, said yes, complimented her hair.
She thought that the dance would mean something to him, would be the perfect moment that all would be alright. That the dance wouldn’t be as mundane and meaningless as simply brushing hair.
But to Erik, it was nothing. Alessia didn’t mean much. She was just a person, it was just a dance, and she got all dolled up for no real reason.
It wasn’t the same if it didn’t mean anything to him.
“I…I think I’ll go home.” Alessia said, letting go.
“Why?” Erik asked, frowning.
But Alessia stormed off without meaning to, her intense desire to disappear out of embarrassment that she ever thought it would mean anything showing on the outside.
Tears slightly blurred her vision, but she kept walking without looking back.
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Alrighty, I think I remember most of your characters in this folder
Oh and lookit, my 400th review =D
And the dialogue formatting strikes again. Commas, creeper, commas.
Oh now that is intriguing. That for Erik, he just didn't want to go alone to the ball and thought that Alessia would feel the same. That it would probably reflect badly on both of them if they showed up alone. He was pragmatic and she was hopeful aww.
And I can rly understand Erik here, being bewildered. He doesn't rly know her but I don't rly like how he doesn't make the effort to ...ya know talk to her.
Also maybe Alessia had her chance during the ball and just didn't impress Erik?
This is a really great short story. Sometimes we can misinterpret things like Alessia and feel embarrassed.
''“Another moment? Together? Alessia, I…this has been nice, but I just want to do it one time.” Erik said.''
Okay the way this guy said this, kind of made me made. Just a little bit. ''I just want to do it one time.'' First of all, that's really blunt and second, if you didn't want to go to the dance with her, and just wanted to be friends, you could have told her that earlier instead of making a fool out of her in front of everyone. Some people are just not so considerate.
Is there another part to this story, because I'm dying to know how this progresses.
There are more parts! They are under my folder titled %u201CZeze and Zuzu the clowns%u201D!
Glad you enjoyed. :>