*This story is underneath my folder titled “Zeze and Zuzu the clowns”. Gacha Club character designs are under this forum: https://www.youngwriterssociety.com/viewtopic.php?f=27&t=116005&start=1125. I hope you enjoy!*
Alessia watched as Andrea and Carter exchanged vows, Uriel by her side. She met Uriel a few days ago, at a line in a restaurant. He was nice enough, but Alessia had a feeling that he wouldn’t stay for long.
While Andrea and Carter stayed by each other’s side well after high school, so much so that they were getting married, men petered into Alessia’s life and ran out of it when she really wanted to be with them.
They loved her only for her beauty. Uriel was probably the same.
But that didn’t matter, because at least Alessia had someone at the moment.
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Hm once again this is a rather sad length for a post. It’s hard to put something really meaningful in this. I mean drabbles sometimes work; they’re a legit art form after all, and poems are also usually short. But with your snippets, I feel like they’re missing something… something like a central theme. This feels more like a snippet from an on-going story that should be...with the rest of that story, rather than all alone here
I do like that Alessia can find a bit of comfort in the fact that she has Uriel atm, even if she doesn’t believe it will last.
I barely know much about this story, I just clicked on it. The short description for it though really drew me in. Imagine your best friend, or someone you're close to marrying the love of your life, while you have to sit and watch them get married. Me personally I would just be trying to sabotage the wedding like Darla Dimple.
''While Andrea and Carter stayed by each other’s side well after high school, so much so that they were getting married, men petered into Alessia’s life and ran out of it when she really wanted to be with them.''
Love can be hard. You find one person that seems good enough for you, but is actually not good for you, and they just walk out on you in your life, that is probably going to leave a lasting scar especially if you have been in multiple relationships multiple times.
''They loved her only for her beauty. Uriel was probably the same.
But that didn’t matter, because at least Alessia had someone at the moment.''
People are always like, 'Do better,'' like, I mean we try to, but people are really the issue. At least we have somebody instead of nobody.
I really enjoyed this overall.
I barely know much about this story, I just clicked on it. The short description for it though really drew me in. Imagine your best friend, or someone you're close to marrying the love of your life, while you have to sit and watch them get married. Me personally I would just be trying to sabotage the wedding like Darla Dimple.
''While Andrea and Carter stayed by each other’s side well after high school, so much so that they were getting married, men petered into Alessia’s life and ran out of it when she really wanted to be with them.''
Love can be hard. You find one person that seems good enough for you, but is actually not good for you, and they just walk out on you in your life, that is probably going to leave a lasting scar especially if you have been in multiple relationships multiple times.
''They loved her only for her beauty. Uriel was probably the same.
But that didn’t matter, because at least Alessia had someone at the moment.''
People are always like, 'Do better,'' like, I mean we try to, but people are really the issue. At least we have somebody instead of nobody.
I really enjoyed this overall.
I%u2019m glad you did. This was fairly short, but I plan to add more.
Thx for reading!
And I love ur profile pic!!!
Thank youuu!
Yw! ^v^