I loved this poem! It’s so............. wonderful! I loved the last stanza! It was my favourite!! The imagery and the words you used were just so amazing!!! I also loved how you used the sentence ‘ a single star is agleam tonight,’ in the first and the third stanza! I loved loved loved the poem!!!
I loved this poem! It’s so............. wonderful! I loved the last stanza! It was my favourite!! The imagery and the words you used were just so amazing!!! I also loved how you used the sentence ‘ a single star is agleam tonight,’ in the first and the third stanza! I loved loved loved the poem!!!
I really liked this poem. The idea was great, and so were the words. The only problem is that the rhythm isn't constant. The first stanza is very jumpy, because there are one too many syllables in a couple of the lines. I still liked it, but you could still improve it.
I like it. I don't feel that the last line of the first stanza has the same rhythm as the rest of the poem, it didn't feel tight. I like it a lot though. It's sad, yet hopeful. I like the theme a lot. I like how the children keep on wishing, even though that the wish isn't exactly being answer. I love the line about the star not caring. It was beautiful, just beautiful. Great poem!
-tgirly
Omg... This was honestly amazing. I wish I could give you a better review with some actual constructive criticism, but I'm not the best poet. Haha
You told such an appealing story through this poem. Can't wait to read more of your stuff!(:
Wow this poem was great. I liked it a lot it was deep and yet simple. I really loved it and hope to read more.
4 owls out of 5.
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