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United

by Vivian


United

By: the Guardians

Fighter, survivor, we’re stronger than you think

We are united

An unbreakable link

We will endure

Because we’re sure

That we can always make it past

Any obstacle the world throws at us

As friends we work together

A team of the best kind

And when one breaks down

The others are right behind

To help pick up the pieces and make everything alright

We’re a team

And together we fight

Only one rule

No one gets left behind

We are united

We are united

Standing together isn’t what’s hard

It’s falling apart and becoming whole again

Because we know we can’t start

All over again

We try our best

To be the best friends

Keeping your head up isn’t what’s hard

It’s letting it fall and climbing out of your rut

But when you got your girls

You know everything’ll be just fine

Because we’re united

We are united

Together as one

We are united

An unstoppable force


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Sun Oct 25, 2015 8:39 pm
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TahaT11n wrote a review...



Hey, vivian!

Well, that's an awesome lyric. I loved the title cus it tells you just in one word what the lyric is about. It's a title that attracts you.

The beginning was great, too. The first line is awesome. I loved specially the third line, "An unbreakable link"..

However, the lines - "As friends we work together/ The team of the best kind" - I would reconstruct it a little bit. I mean, change some words and tell it in another way. Btw, you are the lyricist, it's all up to you how the lyrics will be. I just said what I thought..I had the same thought with the lines "We try our best/To be the best friends"

Anyway, I enjoyed the lyrics...hoping to read more!




Vivian says...


It's part of my Guardians Awakening series.



TahaT11n says...


Oh..



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I like how like how the song is constructed. While reading it I can picture a group of people that are very close. Also the way that its wrote paints pictures in my head, which can be powerful to people that feel very strongly about your song. The only thing that I want to suggest and this is just my opinion but use a little bit more of vocabulary to make the song really hit home. Keep up the good work and I look forward to seeing more of your work!:)





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