United
By: the Guardians
Fighter, survivor, we’re stronger than you think
We are united
An unbreakable link
We will endure
Because we’re sure
That we can always make it past
Any obstacle the world throws at us
As friends we work together
A team of the best kind
And when one breaks down
The others are right behind
To help pick up the pieces and make everything alright
We’re a team
And together we fight
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Only one rule
No one gets left behind
We are united
We are united
Standing together isn’t what’s hard
It’s falling apart and becoming whole again
Because we know we can’t start
All over again
We try our best
To be the best friends
Keeping your head up isn’t what’s hard
It’s letting it fall and climbing out of your rut
But when you got your girls
You know everything’ll be just fine
Because we’re united
We are united
Together as one
We are united
An unstoppable force
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Hey, vivian!
Well, that's an awesome lyric. I loved the title cus it tells you just in one word what the lyric is about. It's a title that attracts you.
The beginning was great, too. The first line is awesome. I loved specially the third line, "An unbreakable link"..
However, the lines - "As friends we work together/ The team of the best kind" - I would reconstruct it a little bit. I mean, change some words and tell it in another way. Btw, you are the lyricist, it's all up to you how the lyrics will be. I just said what I thought..I had the same thought with the lines "We try our best/To be the best friends"
Anyway, I enjoyed the lyrics...hoping to read more!
It's part of my Guardians Awakening series.
Oh..
I like how like how the song is constructed. While reading it I can picture a group of people that are very close. Also the way that its wrote paints pictures in my head, which can be powerful to people that feel very strongly about your song. The only thing that I want to suggest and this is just my opinion but use a little bit more of vocabulary to make the song really hit home. Keep up the good work and I look forward to seeing more of your work!:)