Young Writers Society

Hey Vivian! Thewriter13 here to give you a review.
I like this whole idea of winter in July. It would be a nice feeling, wouldn't it?

Nitpicks!
So you have a lot of punctuation errors, and I think I'll point them all out so you don't miss any. (if any of these are intentional punctuation marks, don't change them )

It is Summer.

This is more of an indentation error. Was this supposed to be indented? It's the only line in the poem that is formatted differently. Only curious

And every false start annoys me.

What do you mean by false start? Are there signs of snow that make you believe it will come? That's what a false start is to me...I just don't think it fit correctly in the poem, as nothing is really "starting falsely" in the poem. If you could clarify, that would be nice

I do not expect the sun in Winter

Or flowers in Autumn

Nor yellow and orange leaves in Spring

So in every part of your poem, you use punctuation. To keep this consistency, I would add commas and periods where they belong here. Lack of punctuation can be intentional, but I don't think that's what you were going for here.

So why Snow? in Summer of all things.

You need to capitalize the 'i' in 'in' as you have capitalized everything else correctly in the poem. Therefore you will keep consistency. You could even make 'In Summer of all things" a new line, just because it seems awkward and different in your poem to have two sentences in the same line.

Its an extremely hot July

And snow in July is extremely hard,

That's what I was told at least.

First off, a comma in "It's" and you have used repetition (which you might have wanted to do) but you should find a different word for the 2nd "extremely." Plus the word itself isn't super descriptive. Also a period after "hard."

My dreams don't know that.

In my dreams they trick me.

Who tricks you? The dreams? Also repetition again You could word it like this:
"My dreams don't know that, however.
They like to trick me every night." Or something like that.

Falling from the sky and covering everything,

Is wonderful. beautiful, SNOW!

I like the innocence you use here. Yay it's SNOW! It reminds me of when I was a kid. I think you could use more description here. "covering everything" is pretty bland and it doesn't give me too much to think about. I wanna feel excited!! Also another punctuation error. Should be: "Is wonderful, beautiful SNOW!" There doesn't need to be a comma between "beautiful" and "SNOW!"

That. There. Is. No. Snow.

Nice use of punctuation here! Makes me really feel your disappointment.

You can see my disappointment can't you?

comma after "disappointment" and I like how you talk to the reader *nods, yes I see it!*

Like a fool, I
believe.

Interesting use of formatting here. But I love this last line! It kinda ends the poem on a sad note But it's still great because it makes the reader feel something.

PRAISE
Okay so you do a great job building up to the part where the speaker realizes there is no snow. You give the speaker real character traits. I can imagine him/her being super excited and then all disappointed. That was great.
Sorry for all those nitpicks, I hope I didn't sound too harsh. This poem has a lot of potential, and those typos just needed to be fixed.
Loved some of your word choice "trickery" for instance. Those evil dreams

Description
So there's room for improvement. You need to work on painting a more vivid picture of what is happening. Especially when the speaker looks out the window during their dream. You barely described the scene. You could've added something about the sky, the colors, etc. Just more imagery.

Overall this is an EXCELLENT start to a beautiful and emotional poem. I can relate to it as well
I hope you find this review helpful! Great work, Vivian. Keep it up
and keep writing!