Young Writers Society


Conspirators of Clay

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Deanie
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Deanie wrote a review · Thu Dec 20, 2012 8:14 pm

Hi Threnody

I just want to say, I loved this poem. It had such a deep inspiring meaning to it and I'm serious when I say it really moved me. You write beautifully and the words flow so smoothly you make writing look effortless. I love how you use clay to bring across the message, a very good choice of symbolism. The poem seems to tell a complete story starting separate, going on a journey and finally being connected, even when the connection starts unwanted.

I can't nitpick this poem at all. I loved it.

Deanie x

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Nightlyowl
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I love this poem, it goes with the saying you never know what you've got until its gone. I love how though you write this poem with clay being the subject matter, I love how you can easily see this applying to love and friendship in human life. That connection touches home especially the lines "In the beginning there is hesitance,/But soon I cannot tell my colors from yours" I love how this explains love perfectly; you're hesitant to connect with this person you like, and then when you do it seems so natural and perfect you can't possibly see your life any other way. I don't know if you were getting at any of this, but that's what I got from it. This poem has inspired me to accept my own attractions and I love when a poem is that inspirational. Great job, five owls out of five.
~ Nightlyowl



It always seems impossible until it's done.
— Nelson Mandela