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by Sylar


Mirror mirror on the wall

Sofa sofa over there

Desk desk in the corner

Man I'm so good at home decoration


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Sun Nov 30, 2014 8:44 pm
theironnovelist wrote a review...



BAHAHAHA
Oh my word I saw this was so popular and thought 'there's no way it's that good- it's a comedy!'
But holy shoot that was funny.

I feel REALLY bad reviewing any of this because it's already so great, but I just have a few ideas.
I'd love it if you changed the title. Maybe something dramatic that somehow ties in, making it foreshadow something somber.

Also in the last line, 'home decoration'...I just feel like there could be a better word scheme. Not quite sure why. "decor"? Eh, too short. Well, maybe you get the point. Something about it doesn't sound perfect yet.

Other than that, no faults at all. Loove it.
I would love to try satire sometime, but I just don't know if I could pull it off XD

Keep it up!




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Wed Nov 26, 2014 11:14 pm
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Sylar14 says...



Oh. Oh my. Beautiful. I could feel the emotions vividly. *clutches heart* Absoluetly astounding.

XD But seriously. It was amusing. I was expecting something completely different after reading the first line. But nope.




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Lolz thanks :)



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Tue Nov 25, 2014 7:42 pm



This is really good! Add a couple more lines and it'd be even better! I love this.




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Tue Nov 25, 2014 7:27 pm
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I found this this to be very humorous.It had a nice flow to it.I really enjoyed it.It is a little short through You could make it a tad longer so it doesn't seem to just cut off suddenly.I like how you repeated the words mirror,sofa,and desk.That add to the upbeat rhythm of it.I must say I like how you didn't rhyme.Mainstream poems today think all poems should rhyme but that's not true.It had a tasteful rebellious feel to it.This was a fantastic job.Good luck!!!




Sylar says...


Thanks, but the whole poem is a joke. It's like "mirror mirror on the wall, who's the fairest of them all?"



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Tue Nov 25, 2014 4:03 pm
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Panda11 says...



funny! I would have never thought of this!




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Thanks!



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Tue Nov 25, 2014 4:10 am
Mojosman says...



Ba-dum-tish!




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Lolz



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Mon Nov 24, 2014 8:50 pm
Charizard821 says...



Hahaha!




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Mon Nov 24, 2014 7:58 pm
aseel says...



hahahaha man that's funny.. so unexpected




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Thanks!



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Mon Nov 24, 2014 7:26 pm
ClydeHightower says...



ahaha best poem ever!




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Thank you!



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kingofeli says...



Pfft, I wasn't expecting that. That was funny in so few words!




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Thanks!



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Mon Nov 24, 2014 5:10 pm
elysian says...



xD




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Mon Nov 24, 2014 1:00 am
RavenLord says...



Um. *giggles a bit* Sorry. Couldn't resist.......heh heh.




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Sun Nov 23, 2014 3:27 pm
Vibe wrote a review...



This was indeed funny! LOL!

Tired of the deep poems somehow though. Just like jack said. Tis gave me the best curve on my whole body.

Great job there bud. I think you're worth following. Hahaha.

I felt sleepy upon bumping on the line "sofa, sofa" though.

man, you make people sleepy.

Sylar, sylar on the net,
when will we ever meet? I hope you'll see
How my room is messy.
So one day you'll fix it
With your amazing decorating skills.

hahahaha!!!!




Sylar says...


Thanks and I love your poem :)



Vibe says...


Really? Wow! Thanks too.



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Sun Nov 23, 2014 9:18 am
Burrow wrote a review...



Jack here for a review, don't know why though. :)

That just but smile on my face, I don't know why but it just did. I just got to say thankyou.

Some poems are just so deep, you know what I mean, while they are good, but they always leave you upset.

This was so good, I don't really know what to say.

It was random and random is cool.

Though I would like to point out some problems.

Oh wait there isn't any:) Just so good.

I am out of compliments, because you made me day either way. Thanks:)

Jack




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Thanks!



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Sun Nov 23, 2014 5:34 am
Astronaut says...



THIS MAKES ME HAPPY




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:) :D :P 8)




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