Hey, Braniac!
This is an amazing work! I liked it much. It just drilled the depth of pain. The longing of heart was beautifully painted.
Man, these lines:
She craved only a heart.
To match the beats of her own.
Just WOW. I like the way you've presented your work in an elegant manner. The vibe of the poem is staunch.
Her mind swirls as her heart beats faster.
She won’t hesitate to take out her sorrow.
Her love.
Her rage.
Each punctuated as a different line.
In the song she’ll sing.
A song. A dagger to dive in deeper through the hole in your heart.
Her heart perfumed with what remained.
Of her love for you.
The narration was so scrupulously made, I got the total picture of the situation, was totally in the speaker's boat.
Clever choice of words, the meaning of the lines are brought out so good. Intense!
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She hasn’t forgotten her love for you.
She wishes you would come back.
Come back...
These words are highlight for the poem, just speaks for Her heart, If we have a heart it is hard to let go.
Great, that you added the lines at the end. It was relatable and realistic. You are with much potential, certainly.
Good job! Keep writing
Looking forward for more of your works.
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