Hi, Spartan 118. I am here to review your poem.
"Another year alive, yet a "
Sentences like this really distracted me.
I don't understand if you're trying to be optimistic or pessimistic in this poem.
As a pessimist would say,"A year closer to death." But then you say things like "I hope to live to a 100."
You could have presented an idea that would say something like,"It's not important to live a 100 years, you can just do something that will make people remember you for a 100 years, that will make you live inside their hearts."
You know, either you make it a positive poem or you make it a dark one. If you add both, you are just gonna make it blurry.
So well, overall, it was a nice poem. Thank you for sharing it and keep on writing. Good luck to you!
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