Hello again!
“I can’t do anything right,” she replied.
“And…you would like to be able to do things…‘right’?” Dr. Hopper presumed.
I'm finishing up my masters degree in clinical psych so I will be a therapist very soon . There's obviously no one right way to do therapy or to conduct as session, I'm just a bit surprised he didn't have her elaborate on what she means by not being able to do anything right - what does that mean to her. (because they could have different ideas of what that means). It could be something as simple as him repeating "you can't do anything right" which could signal her to continue talking about it. Or he could ask her a question to help her go into more detail about it before he tries to figure out what she wants exactly.
Dr. Hopper seemed to narrowly avoid chuckling at this, but he was instantly serious. “The Sisters have said nothing of the sort, but let’s not worry about what they’ve said anyway,” he told her, “I want to know what you want out of this.”
I'm glad he's focusing on her and not the Sisters. She's the client after all
“Well, I do,” Bridget mumbled, lowering her eyes. She hated it, but it was true.
“Don’t say that!” Dr. Hopper exclaimed abruptly, “I’m grateful to you!”
Now I get that he says this because of plot happenings and I'm guessing something that happened long ago in the Enchanted Forest. However, I'm a little surprised he validated her so quickly and he switched things around and made it about him rather than about her, neither of which are particularly therapeutic. Now if you're not super concerned about making this the most authentic-sounding therapy session in the world and you're more concerned about advancing the plot, then I suppose it's fine. But you might want to think about another way this little plot thing could happen without him breaking his therapist form.
“I don’t even know, or…remember what happened to her. But sometimes I dream that she died, and it was my fault.”
Yeah that medicine was totally a scam and her mom totally died. Called it :p
“Well, I’m…sure that’s not true,” Dr. Hopper said, knitting his brows together in concern, “I don’t think you could be at fault for that.”
He breaks form again here too. Especially at the beginning of therapy, a therapist is really trying to gauge what's going on in this person's head and what kinds of patterns and themes are coming out. By refuting her idea "that's not true...you're not at fault" that could be seen as invalidating her experience or not allowing her to express what she's really thinking and feeling. The real therapeutic work (making her feel like this isn't her fault) will come later once she feels comfortable with him and with the process.
“If you do make mistakes more often than most people—and I don’t even know for sure that you do—you should consider the possibility that it’s because of a lack of confidence and not the other way around.”
I'm also surprised that he's giving her ideas about what's causing her behavior right away too. Typically, the therapist wants the client to come to these realizations themselves because it's more likely to produce lasting change if they come up with the idea rather then being told this is what's going on, and again this will come later in therapy once the relationship and everything has been established.
“I was just thinking about one of my other patients who says I’m Jiminy Cricket. So when you mentioned the talking cricket, I thought, ‘Ah, it’s me!’ That’s what made me laugh.”
Excellent, subtle reference to the Once story we're familiar with
“Bridget,” Dr. Hopper addressed her solemnly, “I promise I will not try to take anything away from you. I’m only here to help you. You can tell me anything. You don’t have to be afraid.”
Love it.
Everyone has their own distractions and situations th-that make them anxious.
I think it's interesting that you chose to put a stutter in here because this is the first time this has come up. I feel like you did this on purpose and that it was a stylistic choice, so I'm curious about what about this line or this situation made him anxious or nervous enough to stutter.
“I haven’t found you to be any more awkward and nervous than I am,” Dr. Hopper pointed out.
This feels out of form as well because it's making things about him rather than her, and she's what's important because she's the client.
Overall, the story and the writing are really solid and there really isn't much for me to comment on. I get really nit-picky with therapy related things because of my experience. But, you should still take everything I said with a grain of salt. Like I said earlier, there is no one right way to do therapy and what I said in my comments about the therapy aspect of this is true for my own therapeutic orientation. Someone else could have a very different idea about what the right thing to do or say would be. Little details like that aren't going to make or break your story, but it could effect the way some readers see your piece based on their own understanding or experience with mental health and therapy. You don't need to be an expert on therapy or psychology or anything to be able to write about therapy, it's just some stuff to be mindful of
Please let me know if you have any questions or if anything I said was confusing, and I'll see you over in the next chapter soon!
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