Have you ever realized that
you've been in this body for
how many years?
thirteen, fourteen, counting?
and you don't know
why or
how or
what is
the point of it all?
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And it has been so long
and you still don't know
and you still won't know
until it's over?
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ironic, isn't it?
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Hello.
Kanome here with a review.
Wow, this is totally true on many levels. I love reading poetry that is based to true facts about life. It's interesting and it makes you wonder what is the meaning of living in the same body for many years until you pass.
Grammar usage is perfect.
Punctuation usage is perfect.
This makes readers question about the life we live, which is a good element to have in writing because you need to have the ability to affect your readers.
Keep writing!
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Have a wonderful day!
Kanome
wow, thank you!
Lol, I like this one. I don't know why but I do. I've thought about this sometimes. Why am I here? As a Christian I know and believe it's because God has a plan for us all individually and we're here to fulfill that purpose. Christians are to evangelise and spread Gods word to the world. Be the light midst darkness. I often wonder how many people have ever just stopped and asked, Why? Before. Not many I imagine. It's like in the original Dr. Dolittle movie, when he said nobody ever looks up when they're walking. Always down at the ground or whats directly in front of them. Nobody ever just looks up to see what's there. Rain? Clouds? Blue Sky? Nobody knows because they don't look up. And Nobody asks Why either. Haha. This was profound and I'm not sure you meant it to be that way. Good work, I'll be following. Please review my newest works, I want multiple opinions, Can You Hear Me and We do not ride. We dance, too. Thanks and again nice job!
thank you for commenting on this, and I'll look at those works as soon as I get the chance!
- although it's really better not to advertise on a review. To be honest, I feel kind of taken advantage of when people use the review space for plugins. Just saying
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