I JUST SAW A FACE
When the moonlight shone
And the dreams floated around
Someone was singing
And I was falling in love
When I saw your eyes
Everything in me was there
As I smiled at you
My world flooded with light
Chorus:
How can I explain my heart
Why do I keep smiling
Does everything seem this clear
Could it be I could be bewitched
‘Cause I just saw a face
And I fell in love
In your eyes, I saw every color
Explain to me what I feel
Help me understand how this can be
Make me grasp the truth of my smile
Chorus:
How can I explain my heart
Why do I keep smiling
Does everything seem this clear
Could it be I could be bewitched
‘Cause I just saw a face
And I fell in love
Bridge:
I just saw a face
I just saw your eyes
I want to hold you tight
Breathe with your heartbeat
And never let go of you
Chorus:
How can I explain my heart
Why do I keep smiling
Does everything seem this clear
Could it be I could be bewitched
‘Cause I just saw a face
And I fell in love
I just saw your face
And I fell in love with you
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I understand, at 15 I felt in love like this… it’s a great song to be you’re first one, great job. Well a tip, it looks like you are asking questions without the “?”
For example
How can I explain my heart
Why do I keep smiling
Does everything seem this clear
could it be I could be bewitched
I think this should be like that
How can I explain my heart?
Why do I keep smiling?
Does everything seem this clear?
Could it be I could be bewitched?
But anyway, great song
Hiya Ross! June here!
I promised you I'd review this, and I haven't gotten around to it 'til now.
. The second verse is a itty-bit short, considering the length of your chorus. I can't tell what speed this is to be sung at; if it's slow, then perhaps your second verse is fine. 
But! It's looking a little short, almost as if the chorus is sang twice in a row. 
Though it isn't, I just think it needs more spacing or something like that? XD
I take ages, don't I?
Anyway! Let's have a look at this song:
So! I think it's a great song, dear, very sweet and cute
Overall, pretty good song. Keep it up!
June
you're asking for help to explain your feelings and yet you say something seems clear? hmm. that's confusing.
also, i don't see any particular rhyme scheme here. songs usually have a rhyme scheme, 95% of the time. try rewording some lines here and there.