I think that this is really good!
Like I've said to many people before, I'm a rubbish critique so I'm going to write a nkce review!
I really like the idea of the poem. It's original and in my opinion anyway, it's a very clever, effective theme to write about.
I must say though, I'm not sure if it's just me but some parts of the poem are a tad bit unclear lik the lines -
They drain the mind of all resistance
to the idea you're never going to be the same
not after so long this way.
I think someone else might have said that actually
My favourite part of the poem was probably the last line. It was reall yeffective and in my opinion, imaginative! Well done for that!
Overall, I really did like your poem!
Hope I helped a bit!
Meg xoxo
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