birdfeeder

Hey, I'm here to review.

The reason I Liked this poem is because of its picturesque and simple. The words aren't fighting to stand out, the flow is smooth, and the idea is pretty clear. This is something I've come to expect from you, because you take little things in human interactions with others and turn them into something to be admired.

I'm not a bird person though, I don't know what cardinals, finches, and magpies are. Perhaps I just know them from my native language. o_o

I like how the many types of birds here are open to many interpretations. I compare them with us humans and our many personalities and identities, and because I have that thinking in mind, I find it pleasant and hopeful when the birdfeeder welcomes all birds.

But this doesn't seem to be the case in the second last stanza, where magpie is excluded from the list of birds welcomed there. I think there are two reasons for that here, its either magpies are troublesome creatures (which I think are not because I search them up and find them cute and intelligent) or they don't exist in Maryland (which seems to be the location of the place).

The last stanza closes the poem perfectly, though I think adding a bit more description as to the various colours and patterns of the wings and feathers can make it more visually delicious.

My only critique is the inconsistent capitalization. I don't know why you have to use proper capitalization in dialogues and not in the rest. I think it's distracting and doesn't seem to have a purpose. If it's a case of focusing the readers' attention to dialogues, the italicization is enough already for that. Perhaps it's better to stick with a certain style, like No Capitalization or All Capitalized.

The second one is the PoV. I think using first person of view through the daughter would allow us get into the daughter's head and make this poem more personal or connected. The third PoV as of now seems to give the readers a distance from the characters in the poem.

And that is all! Keep up the good job!

Greetings, lovely work here. I really like how you use simple but elegant language to convey what you are trying to tell, without fancy flourishes or unnecessary lines. Despite the language, it isn't understated or dull, which is a hard thing to pull off. I especially like the line "admiring the beauty of wings and feathers", as it is beautiful language, conveyed in a way even those who don't appreciate good language can understand. The only thing that bugged me slightly was the lack of capitalization, but that doesn't detract from the enjoyment of your work. It almost enhances it, in a way, and adds to the simplistic but pretty feel of the poem. Keep up the good work, and have a nice day.

A beautiful piece of writing. It is simple, yet for one to see the meaning behind it's simplicity takes time. I for one had to reread it to fully digest the words, to that I proudly admit. How have you come up with such a original idea? I apologise if my review is short, but it's just like the poem - short and simple. I hope you will never loose your passion, because as I see from this piece you are really talented.