Hey RippleGylf!
I really like this poem. The flow, imagery, and style is absolutely beautiful. I think, perhaps, you could alter the last line. "Novel ideas" doesn't work for me much because a library has more than just novels and novels is something I see as a more technical term. I think replace that with Fiction (fictitious) but Non-fiction is also stories. Give that some thought and change it if you want. Also in the first stanza, second line "young eyes" i'd prefer something like learning eyes or something personification. Not only young people are learning, everyone is learning. If you are a reader you are constantly learning. Also using personification I think adds a more unique, unusual feeling and meaning to the poem. I love love love love the second stanza! It's so beautiful and the imagery is incredible! "Lives much more comforting" personally with this line I'd prefer changing comforting to riveting or something because stories are adventures and they are thrilling. Personally when I read I'm looking for another word where I can fight, fall in love, lead, etc. Things I can't do, but perhaps your narrator doesn't have a comforting life in her real world. "Joyfully" maybe use www.thesaurus.com to find a more colorful word, though this one is fine.
Hope I helped!
marmalade
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