Mystery, love, hatred, sympathy, jealousy, and lust are held here. These spheres of emotion come in many different shades. The cool shade of ice and slate gives the beholder a chilling look, but a shade of amber and tawny reflects adventure and danger. There's a shade of forest green that promises years of serenity, and a shade of oak that drinks in wisdom and shows teachability.
I prayed for you to have adventure and serenity and love and a chill about you. I wanted everything to show through the orbs sitting high upon your cheeks. We had shared everything through many text messages and emails, but the most sacred of all we kept until the first time we met.
I had never done this before, but when you turned around I feel in love with the rainforest I saw in your eyes. I wanted to explore serenity with you and swim in your knowledge. Never, had I met someone who held two different colored orbs.
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I absolutely loved this, Rascalover! The description was wonderful, and I enjoyed reading this piece. I agree about what the different colors show, and this piece was overall beautifully written. There's nothing I can say about this; it is amazingly written. Good work on this!
-wisegirl22
This is beautiful!
<3 I know this may be weird to some, but I've always wondered if your eye color has any impact on your personality. I noticed during my time in public school (I'm home schooled now) that people with certain eye colors act in a certain way. I also noticed that most of my friends had the same color of eye as me, which is very dark brown.
I though that was really cool and unique. The writing style you used was very appealing and neither your punctuation nor grammar had nothing wrong with it that I could find.
Keep writing! <3
Anyway, I really liked how instead of saying 'eyes' you put orbs or spheres.
Again, this is awesome!
~BookWolf
Thanks! i am glad you enjoyed it!
I am not so sure if this is about eyes or a love poem. Sounds as though a little bit of both. I do like it. Therefore, I am not sure to what put to be a review about your poem. Though, that poems sounds like how I feel about someone right now. Now, if I am wrong I can most certainly take that back. Because as I have said before, it sounds like a love poem. Lol, I know that I am rambling so I will just say. I did enjoy reading this and I love how everything flows together.
It is more like a short story about a woman falling in love with the color of someones eyes. Thanks for your review
Either way, I like it. You're welcome.