I was standing outdoors
Watching the trees swiftly sway
They seemed to be obeying
The clouds that were grey
Everyone was indoors
Fearing a tremendous storm
But I did not feel like
Sitting coiled up in a dorm
The wind blew around my ears
It sounded like a soft whistle
It had no mercy for tree leaves
As it cut through them like a chisel
It soon began drizzling
And the temperature dropped low
It became ever so dim
That the white buildings seemed to glow
And suddenly, to certify its presence
The thunder loudly roared
It seemed to tear the sky into two halves
And the drizzle became a downpour
It was bone-chilling to think
That if this storm went on for weeks
It could wipe out millions
And many heartbeats would cease
Truly, nature is wonderful
But don't underestimate its power
As, through calamities like these
All of us, it can devour
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Hi! Rida here for a review!
First impressions: W O W. This was a wonderful poem and I just loved it!
Glows:
This was a very, very, very, very, very good poem that shows the power of nature. The imagery is perfect. Everything about this is perfect. You should be proud of this. Really. If you don’t mind..... can I copy-paste this work to a separate folder I keep for my favourite poems?
Grows:
So, the thing I point out below is just my opinion, feel free to ignore it.
The only thing I thought could be improved is that you could add more punctuation. I think the page looks a bit neater with punctuation. But it’s just my opinion. Punctuation and all depends on the poet’s taste, so this one is really tiny and you can ignore this.
Lastly:
I loved the poem. It’s wonderful and I really look forward to more of these wonderful poem!
~rida
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Lovely poem.
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Hi!
This is a beautiful poem - you should be very proud of this work. I am in love with the imagery you've used, it makes you feel as though you're outside watching every aspect of nature. You really emphasise the power that Mother Nature has upon us all and how we should take care of our enviornment, especially our planet more. Honestly, I have no suggestions of improvement - you should share it around and I'm sure that others like myself will love this work as much I do!
Keep writing!
Sunlightwarriorxo
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