Storyteller Serves a Meal

Hi there.

I just wanted to leave a quick review. I really like your poem, the style reminds me of a bard or a court jester telling a riddle; it's light, fun, and delightfully perplexing.

I think you did a really great job using the metaphor of spinning a yarn throughout the story, and the verses flowed really well.

I do admit I had to read it about three times to fully understand all of the details, such as at one point I thought the storyteller was at an establishment telling a story to the narrator, but when I read the verse about the storyteller cleaning the dishes I got a little thrown. However, I could have just been reading too much into it.

All in all your poem is great and I hope you keep on writing!

Thanks,
Poetry Misfit

I loved the poem.I thought it did nicely to explain the purpose and goals of the storyteller.The dishes symbolizes the stories the storyteller was telling.That’s another thing,I loved the use of symbolism in the poem.I thought it made the poem more enjoyable to read.A storyteller never rests,they always have new ideas to share with others.I hope you have a good day/night.

Hey there! Plume here, with a review!

Oh, I adore this poem!! I love how it just seemed to flow so naturally. It did such a nice job of evoking that feeling of comfort that comes from spending time with friends; it was overall such a happy, feel-good poem, and I really enjoyed reading it.

One thing I loved was that continued weaving/yarn/sewing imagery. Combined with your repetition, I think it provided a really nice visual to connect and improve the flow of the poem, and it had this delightful effect. I loved how you used "needle-fast stitched laughs in sides" to sort of get that double meaning while furthering your usage of sewing/knitting references. I also think your omission of an article before Storyteller really helped turn the storyteller into a singular character, which really added to that narrative aspect of this. Your title was also really stupendous; I loved that double meaning behind the meal they're serving, and how it could refer to both the literal food or/and perhaps the story that goes along with it. Really nice work!

The only thing I was a little iffy on was the ending. You built up this really nice rhyme scheme throughout the poem and then let it fall off at the end. I wondered if there was a reason to include three lines in the last rhyme instead of your usual two. I think it definitely made the ending stand out more, but to me, it almost came at the expense of a nice, round, satisfying ending which to me would have been more in tune with the overall tone of the poem. I'm curious as to what you intended with that!

Specifics

Storyteller won't eat food

their fork at rest, for now unused.