Royal here for a quick review!
I loved this! Very sweet, adorable, and original.
Two things:
I don't think you need the line about not wanting sex. I think you make it clear that the speaker has pretty pure intentions. You lose me a bit towards the end; I think it gets a little nebulous towards the last line, so I'd tighten that up a bit if you go to edit this. Also, maybe consider not capitalizing every line? See how that affects the impact of the piece, and decide whether you like it.
Overall, really good job! Love the diction, flow, and form. Fantastic!
Points: 36
Reviews: 184
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