// first draft. forgive me for any mistakes, just wanted to get it out there. //
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Hey, Moo! The name's Storm, and I'll be reviewing for you tonight! Happy Review Day from the green team.
Just from the first few lines, the audience receives an insight about the speaker's life. I was taken immediately to the setting you had in mind. (It's quite beautiful there, by the way. Thanks for the free trip.) This is a really neat perspective of something that seems so trivial at first, elaborated by your gorgeous descriptions of the surroundings. Mmm. I can practically smell the sharp crisp of autumn, see the chilly rivers winding through the field, taste the blackberries... Great job, Moo!
I also really like the way the speaker narrates; it's kind of a sassy, humorous, genuine way of talking. Highly enjoyable.
I didn't notice any grammatical mistakes nor any punctuation errors, so splendid work there.
Thank you so much for sharing this, Moo! I'd love to see more from you soon. See you around! And as always: Write on!
---Storm
Jack here for a quick review. Give me a break if I am wrong, I suck at poetry!
That was full of amazing description, it was like re reading the hobbit or lord of the rings. It really took me back o middle earth or Alegasia. You have some real good skill here mate!
It was an odd kind of poem, I haven't really read anything like this before, but heck this was interestingly cool. You have some skill mate!
And the ending was really good, I liked the small () because it feels like it just tops it of!
So overall really good job and I hope I can read some more of your work soon, because I really loved this. You should give a go writing a novel because your writing stile is stuff of magic mate
Jack.
This is dramatically amazing. I love it. Love the fact that you started your poem with a great hook. It is very interesting and made me want to read more, until the end. The vocab words you've used were so deep, which sounded so great and it fits the entire poem or each sentence. However, I would love to know what inspired you or what made you wrote this poem because this is absolutely terrific. Great job! Keep up the fabulous work...