Conan

Hey there moo. Greg here to review your work.
If this is a poem, I think you should divide your lines instead of writing everything in a paragraph. It doesn't really flow well if you write it this way. And punctuations play an important role in a poem. It kinda beautifies the poems so I think you can also punctuate your poem in the appropriate places. It also helps with the flow of the poem.
But other than the format of the poem, I think the content was really good. I enjoyed reading it very much. Your poem gives a clear picture of what you want to say. And I am quite a Conan fan myself and I liked your horse. I was happy to read this poem . Would love to read a lot more of your works.

Cheers
Greg

Hey there moo. Greg here to review your work.
If this is a poem, I think you should divide your lines instead of writing everything in a paragraph. It doesn't really flow well if you write it this way. And punctuations play an important role in a poem. It kinda beautifies the poems so I think you can also punctuate your poem in the appropriate places. It also helps with the flow of the poem.
But other than the format of the poem, I think the content was really good. I enjoyed reading it very much. Your poem gives a clear picture of what you want to say. And I am quite a Conan fan myself and I liked your horse. I was happy to read this poem . Would love to read a lot more of your works.

Cheers
Greg

Hey there moo. Greg here to review your work.
If this is a poem, I think you should divide your lines instead of writing everything in a paragraph. It doesn't really flow well if you write it this way. And punctuations play an important role in a poem. It kinda beautifies the poems so I think you can also punctuate your poem in the appropriate places. It also helps with the flow of the poem.
But other than the format of the poem, I think the content was really good. I enjoyed reading it very much. Your poem gives a clear picture of what you want to say. And I am quite a Conan fan myself and I liked your horse. I was happy to read this poem . Would love to read a lot more of your works.

Cheers
Greg

cool story, so you were into horse riding and stuff, and really liked your horse who's name was conan like the barbarian, and then either stopped riding or whatever or the horse died?

I can't find any grammatical errors, but then again grammar has never been my strong suit. I like your vivid imagery and the space between the story any the last lines. it adds a nice effect to it and the shortness of the last part really sink in.