Love the poem!!!! Hey, hey, hey Dogs here for a awesome review!
So I thought that this poem was really, very good, but let's look over your grammar, punctuation, spelling, and other stuff like that...
1) Grammar... So, I found one grammar mistake, now you most likely did this on purpose, but if not I will point it out anyway... When you say the following..
That's bad grammar if you want then you can change it too... I am thinking of the terrible. But if you don't want to then you don't have too.Me is thinking of the terrible.
2) I noticed that every once in a while you would double space, after a comma, or in the middle of a sentence... Like here...
So you might want to correct those... Or did you do them on purpose? Unless my eyes are bad, that's what I saw.. If you did do them on purpose, therefore, I would like to know why. And when you get the chance you can tell me...And not just me in that moment, but him, us, climbing into stars.
3) I also noticed that you have commas where you don't need them. you don't need extra commas because it will, and most of the time it does, create run-on sentences.
Well that's pretty much all. By the way I was not trying to criticize, so don't take those the wrong way, because, honestly, I was just trying to help. So yeah! I am bad at grammar myself, but thanks to my language arts teacher for teaching me everything I need to know about grammar (Because she is a grammar freak) I have learned a lot... Anyway...
Amazing poem, I really enjoyed reading it!
Keep up the good writing
Love,
Dogs!
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