Honey

MOO YOU'RE ALIVE

As always, it's a pleasure to read your poetry.

I have gleaned that this poem is about a dog, or an animal that the narrator had very close ties to. It's beautiful and thoughtful, and I am having difficulty finding fault with it, so I'll give you my thoughts on it.

The first line is a nice indicator of setting, in spring, as the narrator longs that the animal did make it to summer, and almost made it. There is also a double meaning here, perhaps that the animal was not very old when she passed, not making it to the very good times, or perhaps dying when things were about to get better. Later we find that indeed there is a literal spring, though there is still room for figurative spring.

I love your word choice in the second line specifically. Refolded reminds us that we came from nothing, or the earth, whichever you choose. Also, making the sun do the firing reminds me of those spring days when the air is still chilly, but you can feel the sun on your arms though the parts of you in shadow are cold.

I had to look up what Viaticum was, but I think it's lovely that you would draw connections between an animal's funeral and a human's last rites. It makes the animal seem that much more important.

Your fourth line caused some confusion at first, as I did not know until this moment that the "she" the narrator is speaking of was not a human, and it didn't make sense visually, but then I was reminded of illuminations. Illuminations, as in the illustrations in The Book of Kells and other religious texts from that era. Their animals always somehow were woven into celtic knots, and this is what image it gave me as soon as I realized the she is not a human.

I am not sure if a linnet looks quite like a dead leaf, but I understand why you chose to liken it to a dead leaf.

I didn't understand the friend's words song at first, but then I realized that it was just a sweet song at the wrong time. Unless you mean something else, then I've missed that completely.

What tail did you cut a piece from? The animal or the linnet? I was confused by this because you used "the" here instead of the established she of the animal being buried.

The last bit of the last line is interesting. It juxtaposes life with death, but even then, includes death. The tail compared to the wheat in the starving world implies an immortality of sorts, but one of sadness and only in memory. Lovely.

I hope that my analysis of this poem helps you in some way! A lovely poem. I read your offer, and I was wondering if you could look over my poem A Change of Power and the Queen because I feel like you could give me some nice insight on it. Keep poeting!

I loved Honey it really stuck out to me. It was also really grabbed my attention when you said "She died before she made it to summer." I took me a minute to realize that it was a cat dying though you could have described a little bit better. I really, really loved how you said at the end "It would never die." It is true but the tail will decay just like the body if we want to get logical. In other words it was really good.

Hello there !

This is a piece of beauty. I am in love with it. I can not help but fall in love with it.

The fashion of description writing makes it even more edgy and fresh.

My favourite bits of your work are,
" we left her re folded in ground "

" we cut a section from the tail and held it as if it were the last stalk of winter wheat "

Thank you for posting this wonderful piece.

Greetings
- Cavalin

P.S. I love your username !

I like this alot very Touching feeling type deal. but where did or how i should say is this a piturce that you up loaded on here in different writing because if so im going to do that well maybe i dont. But I love the way you put an discribtion in this. (Excuse my spelling) . but yes I can see the Tape in my head playing just like a movie just flowing. I like that Alot and its Short but i would like to read more of this if you add more on. but its fine. If you are going to put a Period "." in a Stanaz would you Like start another line instead of it being in the middle or towards the end. Because i really didnt see it i read over it. Then i stoped myself and said "Oh a there's a Period "." there. but thats all very Good Detail. So im Done now. BYE