Young Writers Society

Hello Comrade!
Another chapter that is really short. its sharp and good but just a little too short. You have really good buildups, these demons and balrogs Blaze is about to fight seem pretty tough.

It’d only been five minutes since the start of the operation, yet it felt like hours. The worst part was the loud bangs of gunfire in the distance rather than silent plasma going pew pew. There was only one reason why the soldiers had to revert to good old lead bullets. Time was ticking, and there wasn’t much sand left.

groaning and taking heavy breaths while he clutched his head and crotch. Such strange and sudden behavior meant only one thing. At the speed Cecilia ran, she skidded across the ground a bit before she could stop and go help Blaze.

Blaze picked himself up, still calming down from the massive sex drive that overcame him instantly, “Wouldn’t it be faster for you to just kill them now, and I head back to help Ren and others?” He stared at these creatures whose heads touched the skies; three stories tall minimum. One balrog had had a mace in hand, while the other had a hammer. The demon this time, was an ugly amalgamation of an anglerfish and some sort of reptile; a salamander perhaps. If there was one thing these three creatures had in common, is that they were in constant immolation.

"Punch them!” She clapped her hands together, drawing out the full potential of her Ki powers, a burst of wind pulsed from where she stood and pushed away any light objects around her.

“I guess now is as good a time as any.” Fire ignited in a circle around Blaze and combusted all over his body. Fiery wings sprouted from his back and he floated into the air and above the monsters. A scythe of fire burst in Blaze’s hands and with a haughty snort, his flames changed from orange to blue. “Don’t disappoint me now.”

Good Morning/Afternoon/Evening/Night(whichever one it is in your part of the world),

And more of this....

First Impression: WOW. That's about all that's going through my head right now after reading that ending. It's just absolutely amazing. Setting that aside for now, flying on wings made of fire...not the most practical with physics but then who cares about physics right now. And I sense and awesome battle with Lust coming soon.

Anyway let's get right to it,

t’d only been five minutes since the start of the operation, yet it felt like hours. The worst part was the loud bangs of gunfire in the distance rather than silent plasma going pew pew. There was only one reason why the soldiers had to revert to good old lead bullets. Time was ticking, and there wasn’t much sand left.

Blaze propelled himself through the air with fire from his feet like a rocket in order to keep up with Cecilia. At one point, he suddenly stopped and tumbled through the ground; groaning and taking heavy breaths while he clutched his head and crotch. Such strange and sudden behavior meant only one thing. At the speed Cecilia ran, she skidded across the ground a bit before she could stop and go help Blaze.

Blaze picked himself up, still calming down from the massive sex drive that overcame him instantly, “Wouldn’t it be faster for you to just kill them now, and I head back to help Ren and others?” He stared at these creatures whose heads touched the skies; three stories tall minimum. One balrog had had a mace in hand, while the other had a hammer. The demon this time, was an ugly amalgamation of an anglerfish and some sort of reptile; a salamander perhaps. If there was one thing these three creatures had in common, is that they were in constant immolation.

The balrogs and demons converged on Blaze, drooling fire from their mouths at the small snack before them.

“I guess now is as good a time as any.” Fire ignited in a circle around Blaze and combusted all over his body. He began to float into the air as fiery wings sprouted from his back and a flaming scythe lit in his hands. Looking down at the balrog and demon’s orange and red flames, Blaze said, “Don’t disappoint me now.” His flames then burned blue.