Hello Comrade!
Another chapter that is really short. its sharp and good but just a little too short. You have really good buildups, these demons and balrogs Blaze is about to fight seem pretty tough.
It’d only been five minutes since the start of the operation, yet it felt like hours. The worst part was the loud bangs of gunfire in the distance rather than silent plasma going pew pew. There was only one reason why the soldiers had to revert to good old lead bullets. Time was ticking, and there wasn’t much sand left.
I don't see why switching to lead bullets would have anything much to do with time but whatever. It may even the odds a bit... for the hellspawn.
groaning and taking heavy breaths while he clutched his head and crotch. Such strange and sudden behavior meant only one thing. At the speed Cecilia ran, she skidded across the ground a bit before she could stop and go help Blaze.
Good description of the sin of Lusts abilities, i really am looking forward to the big fight with her now.
Blaze picked himself up, still calming down from the massive sex drive that overcame him instantly, “Wouldn’t it be faster for you to just kill them now, and I head back to help Ren and others?” He stared at these creatures whose heads touched the skies; three stories tall minimum. One balrog had had a mace in hand, while the other had a hammer. The demon this time, was an ugly amalgamation of an anglerfish and some sort of reptile; a salamander perhaps. If there was one thing these three creatures had in common, is that they were in constant immolation.
Blaze has the right idea, Cecilia could finish these guys in a second and be no worse for wear. Also an amazing description of the Demon i had a clear picture of it in my head, it felt like it had crawled straight out of hell...
"Punch them!” She clapped her hands together, drawing out the full potential of her Ki powers, a burst of wind pulsed from where she stood and pushed away any light objects around her.
ol' reliable™. also how powerful is Cecilia? Feels a little overpowered to me.
“I guess now is as good a time as any.” Fire ignited in a circle around Blaze and combusted all over his body. Fiery wings sprouted from his back and he floated into the air and above the monsters. A scythe of fire burst in Blaze’s hands and with a haughty snort, his flames changed from orange to blue. “Don’t disappoint me now.”
I haven't mentioned this at all but this whole time iv'e been getting anime vibes from this story, and i am loving it.
Overall A good buildup chapter, again you probably want to condense this into other chapters but its still loaded with description. Its well written and it flows really well too, And your dialogue is natural. I am looking forward to reading the next part.
Keep Writing!
-brotherGeo
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