Hi there Megrim, it's Gymnast2801 stopping by with a review for The Black Cat Squad!
Ooo, this is very interesting! How I picture it is an old man as the main character and a middle-aged man as the sales man. It seems like a utopian world to me, but maybe I'm wrong here. Anyway, I've only found one thing to correct you on
- "You're feeling the Rememberer's love." -
I believe that 'love' is part of this...'title'? If so, it should be capitalized.
Otherwise, remarkable job! I like how you used the sales man's unknowing to get more information out of the main character. This is quite smart! The work flows nicely and word choice is great too!
Wonderful job and keep up the great writing work!
-Gymnast2801 for The Black Cat Squad.
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