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This poem tells such a lovely story through only a few verses. The narrator knows that the crystal fills her with joy, but slowly forgets why: but in the final verse, a younger, second narrator (her grandchild) makes sure she keeps it with her. Meaning wise, this symbolises that we do forget memories of things that we hold dear, but we never lose the happiness they bring us; and in this case, a kind stranger gifts a young girl something she treasures for the rest of her life. Patterns: the narrator slowly forgets part of the story in every verse as she grows older, starting with why it was gifted, who it was gifted by. It's quite sad seeing her memories fade, but it ends happily.
Beautifully written with a really sweet message, keep it up

Hiya! This is Orabella, here with a short review!

I'm so sorry about the huge delay! I realized I wanted to review this but I never got around to it. Well, I'm here now!

To answer your questions: Patterns?

For every verse except the first, the first line has the word crystal. I also either has "remember," "forget," or both. And the first and last verses have the words "As long as you/I have this."

I love the repetition of these words! It feels like the poem is relating back to itself over and over, and I find the way you did that really cool! I particularly like how you made the title, the end of the first verse, and the last line the same. It adds so much power to that sentence, more than I think it would've had if you had only said it once.

Meaning?

Well, to start this off, I'd like to say that I'm really bad at interpreting meanings in general, so I'm sorry if I don't find what you were trying to say. ^^

I feel like it can mean memories aren't always forever, even when you want them to be, and things that are important to you now might not be important to you later. In a way, I feel like this poem is about change, and how it can be good or bad. It could also be about how a single moment doesn't last forever, and how it does at the same time. The main narrator of the poem doesn't remember, but I feel like her grandchild said pretty much the same thing as what she herself said when she was young.

I love the way the narrator progressively gets older throughout, and the different ways you show that. The differences in the ways she talks, for one, and the fact that the person she's talking to changes.

Thank you so much for writing and sharing! Again, your poetry is amazing, and I can't wait to read more by you.

Please keep writing! You've got amazing talent!

hey there, i thought i'd leave a quick review for this poem.

i love that this poem is written in the form of a conversation: the first three stanzas being from the same person, each stanza happening at some point later in life, while the last stanza is a different character speaking to our original narrator. i especially loved how you made use of the paragraph alignment to make the distinction between the two speakers.

i suppose i'll start off by trying to answer the first question that you left at the end of your poem. to me, the poem is about how even small moments of kindness, like a stranger giving you a crystal as a child, can stick with you for the rest of your life. and even though the narrator slowly forgets how she came to have the crystal, she still held onto it. honestly, what's most touching about the poem for me is in the last stanza, where the granddaughter says, "Your brother said it was important to you." even though everyone seemed to forget where exactly the crystal came from or why the grandma cherished it so much, the brother made a point to remember that his sister loved it so much; i just think that's so sweet. thanks for sharing this here : )

Hello, Ant! I just wanted to start out by saying how much I love this piece! This is going to be a rather short review-- as I don't have any criticism for it. I found it absolutely perfect just the way it is.

Firstly, the format of this story was what caught my eye. I really liked how the narrator's child spoke to them. Wonderful idea, there! This was definitely a tear-jerker. :')

Now, to answer your thought-provoking questions!

Do you understand the meaning of the poem? Yes! This poem seems to be about time, and how your memories fade with each year you grow. It starts off with the narrator as a child, and slowly works up to old-age. The grandchild knew that the crystal was important-- so I think that this poem's message is that we will always remember something from our childhood. It may not be clear, we may not remember why we're connected to it, but it's a form of comfort. I still sleep with my blanket from when I was a baby, between you and me. XD

Do you see any patterns? I noticed that every first line except for the first stanza started with something related to the 'crystal'. I knew automatically that the crystal was super important, but starting each stanza with mention of it creates even more emphasis.

Overall, this was a wonderful read! Thank you for sharing. <3

With Love,
Ley

Ooh! This is so cool! Is this the poem you were referring to?

I love these lines (it's so silly):

I will never forget that moment

I don't remember why

she gave it to me.