Young Writers Society

Hey there, friend! I decided to take a look at your other poems on your profile, since reading your spider on the mirror poem. I really like your poetry style, so I thought I would take a look at what else you've got! Let's jump right into the review, shall we?

This poem was very simple and direct and straightforward. It seems like we are preparing to watch a show at the theater, perhaps. We just go through all of these different descriptions of what it looks like. I like how you give internal and external observations. You talk about the curtains opening, which is an external observation. It's something that we see. Then we talk about light foot steps in the darkness, something that we hear. You talk about warm lights, which is something we feel. And then you talk about excitement, which is an emotion that we feel inside. And then at the same time we're getting this narration of what's actually happening around us, such as the show starting at the end.
I found this to be a very emotionally grounding poem. It's like when we're overwhelmed and we do things like count all the things that we can see you here or feel or taste or smell. That poem feels a lot like this. It's very easy to read through and simple, but it still allows me to paint this really lovely picture in my I think because it was so open ended, it allows me to really reflect on my past and times that I've been in the situation. I grew up, going to the theater a lot, so this phone brings back a lot of good memories. Overall, wonderful job! Keep on writing.

Your friend,
Ellie

Howdy hey! Gengar here for a quick review!

I like the description used in the poem. It really helped make everything feel more.. alive? Uhh I'm not sure if that makes sense or not, but basically I'm trying to say that I could clearly envision the theater

Although, I had hoped there would be a description of what the show is like. I understand that the cliffhanger ending was most likely intentional, but I think even a little bit about the show itself would improve the poem

Keep up the good work!

--GengarIsBestBoy

Hello there. This is loveissourgrapes and I am here to give you a short review/comment for your short poem here. Like this is the most random but like neatly random poem I have read. But anyways, let's get into it.

First impressions. I can see what you have described in here and that is what I love about your poem. Like whatever you describe, I can imagine it. I miss going to plays or musicals so I am happy I can see watching any of which. How matter how short it is, it's good.

Oh, I can smell the air of a theater. Even if it wasn't described. In each line, you can feel it and imagine the description of it. I don't know what type of poem is this but if the lines rhymed, it would be better. Not saying it's bad but it would be better if the lines rhymed. You could also explain how the show went and how it ended.

Overall, it is good. Keep on writing! I love your poems the most. Have a good morning, afternoon, or evening everyone!

Hello! Here for a quick review!

The thing I like about this poem is the way it describes the excitement that build up pre-show in a theater. From the curtains to the show, everything in the theater is perfectly described. I feel it would be much more beautiful if it's paired with rhyming. However, it's good even without the rhyming but the rhyming sequences would make it much more poetic. But again it's a good one there. Great job!

Hi @LuminescentAnt

I'm here to leave you a review!

The first thing that made me want to read your poem, was your title.
"The Theater" I love it, it's also the perfect fit for your poem since it's about a theater. I personally love theaters, so you got that piece very right.

"Scarlet curtains
rows of seats"

Good start, I would say.
These sentences create very vivid images for readers if they're wanting to imagine. I love it. Scarlet, is also the perfect colour.

"programs scattered
all across carpeted floor"

Good word choice over here!

"People wait
excitement grows"

Oehhh...I'm excited 2.
I can't wait for the curtains to open and see the master piece of an act or something else. "Excitement" really really "grows".

"then warm light fades
eyes are peeled"

Yes, I've got my eyes wide open. Touché, turn off the lights! It's getting better and better.

"watching the stage
curtains open"

Finally, the curtains are opened. I am visualising the stage.
(me jumping on my chair as if it's a tribune I'm sitting on waiting for the performers to enter the stage, with a big shower of excitement.)

"some light footsteps
in the darkness"

(That's right, Come on out on the stage.)
Nice job! You make it so lively, that's great.

"then the spotlight
the show begins"

This is so great with the spotlight and it's so wholesome.
The show begins...Boom!

I love it,
I like it,
I want to read more of it.

You did an amazing job, keep up the great work!
I really appreciated and loved your poem.

- Rinisha

Hello!
This is a brief but evocative poem that captures the anticipation and atmosphere of a live performance. The imagery of the scarlet curtains, rows of seats, and programs scattered on the floor effectively sets the scene and creates a sense of excitement. The use of sensory details, such as the warm light fading and eyes peeling, adds depth to the description and draws the reader in. The final lines create a feeling of anticipation and excitement as the show begins with the sound of light footsteps and the spotlight. Overall, this poem effectively captures the energy and anticipation of a live performance, and the concise structure and use of vivid imagery make it a strong piece of writing.

This was good!