Hello, FlamingPhoenix here with a short review for you on this lovely day. I will also help get this out the green room.
Let's start.
First off, I think @Toboldlygo Pointed out everything that need to be fixed. I do agree that this line was a little confusing.
They have a sick mother, who cares about nothing but herself.
I do a greet this could be worded a little better. Because when I read this I thought she was sick like ill type of sick. But like @Toboldlygo said I could also be read as a revolting type of sick. But if she was ill then I would have worded it like this.
They have an ill mother, who cares about nothing but herself.
But other than that I really liked this work, It could teach you a lot about what your mother and father has to go through to bring you up. I know some kids hate there mother and father because they don't spend enough time with them. And I think it is part of growing up, there for your childhood.
So I think everyone having trouble with their mother and father should read this. It's a really good way to explain things to them. So great job.
Well that's all from me for now. I really liked reading and reviewing this for you Liberty. I do hope you will keep writing and post more on YWS soon. Never stop writing and have a great day or night.
Your friend
FlamingPhoenix.
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