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I can totally relate to this piece! The piece was short, and to the point, with no fluff. I enjoyed it however short it may have been =]
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I like it. Like Sassykat said, short and simple. I do think you should add more; it doesn't feel quite complete. I would change the third line of the first stanza to something like "feeling feverish" or "It makes you feverish". Other than that, I really like it and I would love to read more.
I like this one. Short and simple. It could go a little deeper, adding a little more meaning, but personally I like it just the way it is. Fantastic.