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This a beautiful, powerful poem. It's a very interesting idea of the girl realising she is in fact dead, kind of exciting and horrifying at the same time. Can I suggest spacing out the questions a bit to give the poem more....I don't know....poignancy? All the questions kind of give the piece a manic, fast, out-of-control feel, which may have been what you were going for, but I think the grief of the mother and the solemnity of a funeral could be written about more...slowly I guess. Sorry, doesn't totally make sense. Anyway, I love you poem. Thanks for posting.

I like how you wrote your poem entirely in questions. It gives the reader some leeway and keeps them interested. Interaction with the reader is always good. It was unique how you wrote it along with the storyline. Good work. Keep on questioning!

-Crescent

Hi-ya! I couldn't really get into this one because it was firing off questions faster than a machine gun. I do like the story line to it, the girl finds out she's really dead at the end. For me, it could be better with more imagery. I didn't feel or see anything, I just read what you typed (most of it ) Good job! Keep it up!

Wow, nice