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Hi!
I really enjoyed this poem, it was beautiful and truthful.
The length was wonderful and the title was gripping as well as the beginning paragraph.

If you can create a world with just your words
Where sounds are bright and colors sing
And your people’s fate is what you choose,
If you can believe in what you think
And give your all and make it show,

If you can dance to the sound of lightning
And paint the sight of thunder,
Your imagination has no limits,
And you can be a writer.

Hi, so, one word comes to mind when I read this. Wow. This is offficially my favorite poem in the world! You're amazing! I love how you make it all seem so elegant in a way, like you are painting a picture with your words in a way. I wish I was as talented as you. Did you write this poem to describe yourself? If so, you did an amazing job at it, and it's very accurate. Well, it's very nice and I love it. Keep writing, you're very talented. Good luck!

~Forsakinshadow~

PS: This deserves a major 'like'.

Hey there.

This is pretty good. My only problem is the rhyme. I don't thnk it works with this poem at all. Although your subject matter and some of the lines are really nice, I just don't think rhyme works here. I recommend editing this a bit.

Besides that, good job

HI there.

This is very good. I've never read the poem that is inspired by so I'm just judging this as an original work.

For starters, your structure is very good, if somewhat conventional. As you probably know, the four line stanza is the most common form of poetry, so you need to have some genuinely good ideas and language. You do that very well.

Also I love some of the lines in this. My favourite I think is

"If you can dance to the sound of lightning
And paint the sight of thunder,"

So good job.