Who are we?
What are we?
I am the same as you
We encounter things
That none of us could understand
People would look down on us
They see us “unusual”
Others would call us “special”
We run and hide
So no one would question
“Who we really are”
There are people like us
They run away
They hide themselves
It's unnatural for them to stay
Confusion,
Isolation,
They tell us something
Happiness,
Sadness,
Pain,
The mixed feelings they have
Do you have them?
Danger are onto us
Strangers keeping us in their base
Testing us with their trials
We use our ability
To avoid them
There are others cannot
Help,
Protection,
Safety,
We do these for our love ones
Our friends and family
Who are close to us
The day I remember
You lost someone dear to you
I helped you stood up
The day I lost
And another one
Was trying to protect me
We both lost
A friend who hid his identity
For so long
Someone was crying
Blood and tears were mixed
On my skin
I sense of tragedy
While calling that person's name
Agony,
Hate,
Revenge,
Feelings that came from our leader
A friend who lost a friend
A person who was like his brother
But you knew
That was a sign
To us all
To protect one another
You have to steal
The powers from our kind
Anxiety,
Loneliness,
Before you left
You promise
That you would return
Scared,
Believe,
A year has passed
You were in your bed
Watching outside with a smile
But when you looked at me
Giving me that strange look
I realize, you don't remember me
“That’s okay, you don’t have to.”
Relieve and happiness
Are the only feelings that I have.
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Hi there. I'm reading your poem and giving you a review at the same time. so far so good. I think you mean 'We do these for our loved one' you wrote 'love'. I just love how you put words like agony,hate.etc after two or three stanzas it build's the poem with true feelings. I think you meant relief and happiness at last. Well I've never heard of the anime but I think I have got a good idea of the anime by reading your poem rather than the mistakes I just pointed out to you there I loved you poem and it's build's a very good story that keeps us reading. Is that blonde girl Chaorlette? or what was her right spelling well anyway keep up the good work well I think I have not offended you my miss spelling that girl's name.
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I've never seen this anime, so I'll just stick to comments about the technical aspect of the poem.
I think the line "Who we really are" doesn't need quotations, even if it's a quote from the anime. I think it'd be more effective without it.
You don't need to capitalize and punctuate every line. I think if you left the commas out of the stanzas that are just two or three words, it'd be way more effective.
Halfway through, it seemed like the speaker started talking about something totally different. I felt like I was reading two completely different poems. So if you cut this in half and made a separate poem out of the last half, both poems would have more of an impact on the reader.
I think you could generalize this in a way that would be more relatable to people who haven't seen the anime. I think if you talked more generally about the concepts of love and loss, and then applied those concepts to a single scene from the anime, rather than the entire anime, the poem would be both more relatable to a larger audience, and still retain its meaning to the people who have seen the anime.
Personally, I wasn't a huge fan of this poem (mostly because I haven't seen the anime, so it's possible my thoughts are totally invalid). I'm more of a metaphor kinda girl, rather than explicit statements like "anger," "believe," etc. But that's just my opinion, and since I haven't seen the anime, I'm sure the fans of it would love this homage to the characters. Good job!
Hello there.
I can say that I really understand this work fully because of my lack of knowledge about this anime but I had heard a lot about it and I felt the feels enough without even watching it. Well, I did not watch it because all of the comments about it and news when it came out actually even if it now that new anymore.
From what I understood of this work, and what I personally know about this anime ( if I can say I know at least a bit, hehe ), it is about people different from the other and they are a total different kind. Each with a very specific and different from the next one power that they decide what to do with, bad or good, use it or not. This work is really sweet but at the same times heartbreaking but of the very end of it.
When someone you really care about does not remember you at all..well, if this is not heartbreaking and a feeling that can actually ruin you, what else it is?
I have no complains because you have good vocabulary and right punctuation, and grammar.
I am surprised how a good poem a memory for one anime can be. Very good job and hope to see more of you sooner or later.
From all these feels, surely I will not be able to watch the anime in the end. XD