Every Single Tear is a Fragment

This review will be short, I think, so I will try my best to still help you while we are going through this work you have here. This is the third review I am making of something you had written, and for now I am impressed by your ways and styles of writing. I am kind of disappointed to see that this work is written in the basic style and way, because I got used to this unique font of yours, which I had seen in your other two works. ( you have more works than 3 but I had seen only 3 so..)
This work is short so I can not say a lot about it as whole. I like the way you use the word you had put as last at the first line, as a first word in the following line, as in:

Every single tear is a fragment
A fragment of memories



So the 'fragment' repeatment and not only there. Every word in the same way. Maybe it will not be liked by all, but I personally kinda like it, so this can not be counted as a complain from me. I am not lazy, so I will go through the whole work and edit/correct these mistakes connected with the grammar and the punctuation, wherever I see them, of course. The editing with be the more helpful part of this review, please, do not take this harsh editing for an offensive comment upon your work. This is just something I had noticed, so I wished to correct it, together with you, allowing it.



Every single tear is a fragment,

a fragment of memories.

Memories that I can't remember.

Remember the unknown.

Unknown to a certain place,

place that there is people.

People that I don't know,

know to every single tear.


By the way, I think your avatar is from Persona 4 or anime with similar animation style.
Overall, I really love your work. Felt the emotions and deepness of the work, of course. Maybe you could fill up this work, so I could get into it more.

Hello there! I absolutely love the concept of this, well done!

The repetition that joins the sentences, allows this poem to flow in an almost lyrical way which is really beautiful. I felt that this poem was very well thought out, whilst remaining short and sweet.

The line "A fragment of memories" is particularly interesting. The atmosphere associated with this idea is captivating and mysterious and I feel that it sets up the feeling of the poem very well. I also found myself questioning the experiences of the narrator, where is the place and who are the people? Are they pieces of a puzzle? Are the tears a metaphor for memory loss? I would love to read more into this and really see how far it could go, to really understand your thinking.

Additionally, I felt that this could be elaborated on, perhaps explore the meaning behind fragmented memories a bit more as I found that very interesting. Also, you could try to incorporate more literary techniques to make the language and structure more complex. Perhaps add a few caesuras or something to fragment the structure, as a reflection of the poem's theme of fragmentation and uncertainty?

Just a few little ideas but overall this is a very nice poem, with some largely gripping themes that I would love to see explored further.

Good job!

I really like the flow of this! Very well thought out. The end is very clever as it completes a full circle. I would love to see similar poems with more length and complexities. This feels more like a catharsis of ideas, but have a lot of potential for more development. Your style reminds of 'spoken word poetry'. Perhaps, you should experiment with it a bit more. Some beautiful ideas paradoxes here - memories that can't be remembered. The theme of dreams and visions needs to come through more explicitly though. Look forward to reading more from you Keep writing!

Hey kitty! Fangirl here!

This was short and sweet! I love it when people write short but with a lot of meaning. So about your poem, there is not much I can say. Yes it was beautiful and the way you ended the poem was also good. I like the concept of tear that you used. Yes tears are like memories. Memories be it good or bad. So yeah good work there.

Sorry this was short but there really isn't much to say.

So yeah keep on writing
Fangirl~

Woooooooooowwwwwwww! This is the only word I can say as review. The way you write and joined and start with the word in other sentence in a flow is amazing.yes! Catchy sentence
"Every single tear is a fragment"
But somehow in the end I feel an incompleteness. May be its only me who felt this. But overall nicely penned . Keep writing . And yes I like your style of penning . Great idea. Will try someday. Blessings!